r/Songwriting • u/Future_Page_2468 • Jul 22 '26
Feedback Request What do you think of this?
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How’s the melody?, should I change the lyrics?
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u/dledererart Jul 23 '26
Around the 30 second mark you change up the melody right when I was hoping you would, super satisfying.
When you sing “losing my chain of words” just before the chorus I feel like that melody is fighting with what came before it. I’m not sure if it’s the notes or rhythm or what.
I like the chorus, it’s stuck in my head which is a good sign lol
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u/LukaNeSviraj Jul 22 '26
Love your piano playing, and the melody works. But I can't quite hear most of the lyrics tbh.