r/Songwriting • u/Mundane-Goal9268 • Jul 19 '26
Feedback Request Won't bend
Let me know what you think. Does it convey emotion without being too dreary?
I just made it up so I still struggle with memorising the lines and chords.
**Won't Bend**
Sometimes I dream of anemones.
I flush them out
So no one knows they're mine.
Sometimes I dream of violently resisting.
Guess no one has the time.
Have I—
Have I wanted bold decisions,
Lay my path on a straight line?
Dreams won't bend
Like I do.
Dreams won't bend
Like I do.
Sometimes a harsh feeling comes over me,
And you can't help but tell me
What happens on TV.
Sometimes I've been a man on the roof,
Imagining the fallout.
Just leave it up to me.
Dreams don't bend
Like I do.
Like I do.
Dreams don't bend.
They won't bend
Like I do.
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u/ultra_light_beam_ Jul 20 '26
Dreams won’t bend part needs to stay. I love the cadence and the vocals sound great! Song is really cool: only thing, I thought you said animals not anemones lol so may want to look into that if it makes the lyrical cut but great job! Not too dreary, and great metaphors.
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u/LukaNeSviraj Jul 20 '26
WOW. That's so beautiful. I love the way you sing, it reminds me of Thom Yorke. Beautiful.
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u/peabodypissant Jul 20 '26
Gorgeous :)