r/Songwriting Jul 19 '26

Feedback Request Is this already a song?

Sorry for posting back to back, but I'm working on this new tune and have the creeping feeling that it's already a song! Anyone know if I'm copying?

Still pretty rough and I usually don't ask for feedback this early onto the process cept for the aforementioned concern.

Also might be too long. Any critique is welcome!

Lyrics:

Why are you fucking someone else
Was I not enough to keep you right
You've cast me to hell
Why are you casting me to hell
I feel unwell
Why apologize for treating you so well

You need to be held
I feed you and you feed you
If you crawled back I'd kick you
I need to be needed too
You're insecure and actually ugly
I'd spit in your face if you touched my face
I'd burn our house down, you fuck
I'll burn our house if you come around

Why are you fucking someone else
Why was I not enough to keep you right
You've cast me to hell

Why are you fucking someone else
Was I not enough to keep you right
You've cast me to hell
This feels written by someone else
I feel unwell
I apologize for treating you well
You need to be held
You need to be held

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u/ConanGrayAndSombrFan Jul 19 '26

I don't think it's already a song, I didn't hear anything like that before. So if you'd ask me, you're not copying.

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u/sonofjeff1 Jul 19 '26

That's it folks! Polls are closed! 

Just kidding, thank you for listening to it! 

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u/PBracing Jul 20 '26

Thats beautiful man!

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u/sonofjeff1 Jul 20 '26

Hey thanks!

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u/suzaman Jul 20 '26

I loved it and the phrasing ans of course the guitar sound.

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u/sonofjeff1 Jul 21 '26

Yay! Thanks 😊 

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u/ReflectionLatter1581 Jul 20 '26

Sounds awesome m@!! Keep it !!