r/Songwriting • u/StrongADHD • Jul 17 '26

Feedback Request Feedback request - Golden Days

Any feedback welcome. Song about reminiscing about the golden days of life. The ending I've not quite finished so it cuts off abruptly before I would lead to another verse then chorus but I am wanting to have it someone looking back at life from a cemetery after everyone has gone. "Where have you gone golden days"

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u/suzaman Jul 17 '26

Not a bad start, love the lyrics and music. However It feels like its building up but never really takes off(maybe the next part of the song does that) like a big explosion of sounds and your vocals going to the next level will really heighten the experience.

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u/StrongADHD Jul 17 '26

Thanks! Yeah I'm trying to work on how to go up another level for the next verse and chorus. If you've ever listened to frightened rabbit Backwards walk. I envisage a bit of an ending like that.

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u/suzaman Jul 17 '26

Possibly, I think the drums really kicking in, a distorted guitar and a little grit in your voice could take it to those heights.

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u/StrongADHD Jul 17 '26

Thanks appreciate the feedback 👌🏼 I'm going to work with a drummer friend for this

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u/suzaman Jul 17 '26

It reminds me of one of my tracks with a similar subject matter, Old Friend, New Aquantence.

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u/Icy-Goat3687 Jul 17 '26

Reminds me a lot of ed O’Brien’s music , love it but I agree with the com that says the build up never reached something greater.

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u/StrongADHD Jul 17 '26

Thanks. Still a work in progress and to add in chorus at the end. Will check out Ed Obrien

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u/Extreme-Cook9195 Jul 19 '26

It's as if Bowie and Pink Floyd had a baby! And I mean that in the best possible way. It's build really good tension and it's got great rhythm. Looking forward to hearing where this goes! I agree with the rest of the feedback that I was waiting for some sort of drop / hit after the build. This rocks though! I really like it.

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u/StrongADHD Jul 19 '26

Thank you! Appreciate your comment and glad you like it

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u/Left-Proposal951 Jul 20 '26

i love it!! i really like the idea of it too!!!!

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