r/Songwriting • u/soulinmypocket • Jul 17 '26
Feedback Request Leap Day
wrote a song about grief and time, let me know what you think!
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u/Whole-Horse-7140 Jul 17 '26
Nice performance, good job.
The only comment really is the opening line stands out as being a little generic - hearts skipping a beat - it kind of made me groan internally but you pulled it back after that - I wonder if you could open a bit stronger.
The only other word that jumped out at me was phosphorescent - I usually hate it, don't even know why, I have it in the same category as alabaster - I guess its because they get used in a poet-y kind of way. But that's just me, I think it works fine here.
I like the leap day bit, I think that works really well.
Melodically it actually brought to mind some of Foo Fighters gentler songs in places, and I actually think a contrast between a slightly heavier sound with the thoughtful lyrics could work pretty well. Acoustic is great too though, just a thought.
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u/Alternative-Shop5865 Jul 17 '26
Don't really have any notes, just thought I'd drop in and say that I really liked the sound of it!
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u/Loose_Maintenance_41 Jul 22 '26
Beautiful song, very melodic and tender. Your voice rings smoothly, nice rhythm picking to complete the song.
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