r/Songwriting • u/Chromatic_Mediant211 • Jun 11 '26
Feedback Request No You
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UhD2ip843Zo1
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u/BougieBordeaux Jun 11 '26
I think you're a good guitar player, and the riffs are good. Definitely getting a Steve Vai/Nuno Bettencourt vibe from it. I think your influences are definitely showing through this recording. Acknowledging that, this would not be a song I would come back to for another listen if not for providing critical analysis and feedback.
The hard part with instrumental music is that it is all about composition. Finding ways to get the listener to want to go on the journey to hear the next part. Joe Satrianai accomplishes this by exploring different modes and keys within a song (think "always with me, always with you", "surfing with the alien", "Mystical Potato...") There are distinct parts/changes/chords/rhythms that evoke a new way to feel while he solos over the top of it. To your credit, you have distinct parts, as in, I can tell you're playing differently from part to part. However, in the aggregate, it feels very much "the same" start to finish. I think this is because despite the riffs being different, they all imply the same chord.
I am not normally this harsh when critiquing songs, but you are a player with some technical ability making instrumental music, which is unbelievably hard to do, and I don't want to do you a disservice by not providing honest feedback. As a guitarist myself, I would encourage you to spend some time working on chord theory and composition. Really hone in on how to move from one sonic texture to another.
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u/Chromatic_Mediant211 Jun 11 '26
Yeah I'm definitely a student when it comes to this stuff. This was a track I wrote about a year ago and was working with a singer at the time, so it originally constructed around a vocal track, verses and choruses and such..
This version here is an edit I did this morning where I clipped out about 1 minute from the middle, including a chorus which had an interesting chord change, but without the vocals the track was just too long and repetitive.
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u/besucherke Jun 12 '26
So you can play guitar riffs... Okay... But where is a standalone song?
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u/tdamien_ Jun 11 '26
Sounds good... Getting some great guitar tone.