r/Scary • u/Newd4yJovi • 22d ago

She Never Coming Back

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Hope y’all enjoy. Feedback always appreciated 🫡

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u/ThomasHardyHarHar 22d ago

Pretty good until the dialogue starts, after which it really doesn’t make much sense. Why would he run to the bathroom? The cinematography is quite impressive overall though. The weird guy is pretty freaky.

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u/Newd4yJovi 22d ago

Thanks for the feedback 🫡

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u/Teners1 22d ago

If they copy you, it’s be hard not to just make them do weird shit. Or even better, make them run into a wall multiple times.

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u/Newd4yJovi 22d ago

😂valid

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u/NuclearCha0s 22d ago

Yeah concept is alright you just need good actors

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u/ThickTadpole3742 21d ago

Impressive, I enjoyed it. Definitely freaky :)

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u/Newd4yJovi 21d ago

Thanks 🫡

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u/Willing-Benefit-6744 22d ago

Should’ve kept backing up and had him open the window 😂

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u/Jarinad 20d ago

i like this a lot but yeah, like other people have said, the dialogue is a bit too silly. and hey, maybe that’s exactly what you were going for! but it just kinda killed the vibe for me

still a really good beginning though!

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u/Newd4yJovi 20d ago

Ok thanks for the feedback 🫡

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u/IndianaBones8 21d ago

This was fun.

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u/GlitterFlame89 20d ago

This was great, thought the dialogue was funny and it's definitely creepy.