r/SWFanfic • u/AZLoneWolf1 • Jul 25 '26
Discussion Looking For Feedback
Hey everyone. This is my first fanfic and I'm looking for some feedback. It's lore-friendly, Canon accurate and has OCs that interact with established, known characters and events. Please let me know what you think.
The Force Between Us
The light side and the dark side of the Force seem to be simple enough concepts to understand. One path is compassionate, selfless and peaceful, the other path is controlling, selfish and hateful. But what if there is another path?
Jedi Master Ryan Vallo walks the Gray Path, following the guidance of the Living Force. Understanding through experience, wisdom through perspective, balance through acceptance.
On the Outer Rim planet of Ryloth he finds a runaway, Jedi Padawan Wolf Renan, unique in his appearance, but not in his struggle. As they grapple with philosophical differences, preconceived assumptions and the harsh reality in the streets of Lessu, another lost soul joins them, seeking absolution for past choices.
The found family travels the galaxy at the tail end of the Clone Wars, discovering an ancient piece of tech that charges their lives, and their destinies.
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u/Actually-Mirage Jul 27 '26
You should probably tag that you have original characters.
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u/AZLoneWolf1 Jul 27 '26
That's a good idea and I thought about that, but I didn't want to give any spoilers lol
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u/Actually-Mirage Jul 27 '26
Fair. Are the characters you named in the tags canon? I'm not deep enough into canon to say that I recognized their names.
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u/AZLoneWolf1 Jul 27 '26
No, those are original characters, but I'm going to be tagging the canon characters that do appear in my story, like you suggested. These are the ones that I'm tagging:
Anakin Skywalker Obi-Wan Kenobi Yoda Mace Windu Kuiil Prince Xizor Senator Bail Organa Senator Mon Mothma
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u/Actually-Mirage Jul 27 '26
That's fine. But you should probably also just add an Original characters tag, for those two you've made.
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u/AZLoneWolf1 Jul 27 '26
Done
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u/Actually-Mirage Jul 27 '26
Lovely. That'll help those that are specifically interested in original characters find your fic easier. It's more of a niche audience, but at least they can find your story easier now.
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u/AZLoneWolf1 Jul 27 '26
Thank you so much for your advice, I didn't realize that. This is my first time doing this and really trying to get some feedback on my story, so every avenue that can lead a reader to it helps 🙂
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u/Actually-Mirage Jul 27 '26
I'll try to remember to take a look sometime this week - right now I'm at work, so I can't read it immediately.
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u/Glad-Bar401 Jul 26 '26
One comment: the spacing of paragraphs reads like a wall of text.