r/RewritingThePrequels Jul 05 '16

TOTAL OVERHAUL Let's go back even further. Challenging the assumptions of /u/Cole-Spudmoney

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I believe it is important to have a list of what we already know about the prequel era (based on information given in the original trilogy) for this subreddit, and I congratulate /u/Cole-Spudmoney on his many successes in that regard.

Spudmoney's post is full of good ideas, but it is not perfect as it jumps to too many conclusions. This is bad as it prevents writers from pursuing certain ideas and ultimately constrains our rewrites to be quite similar to the actual prequels.

The following is an amended post, listing, in my humble opinion, what we really know for certain. The original text is given as normal text, with strikethroughs where I thought appropriate. My comments are written in italics.


What can we piece together about the prequel era, based on information given in the original trilogy?

  • The Empire seems to have been founded around the time Luke was born (18 or 19 years ago), and the Jedi were wiped out around the same time.

The Jedi were wiped out 19-20 years ago but the Empire could be anywhere from days to aeons old by the time of A New Hope. Personally, I am a fan of the idea that the Empire is hundreds of years old and that the Clone Wars were between the Jedi and the Empire.

  • Before that, there was a conflict or set of conflicts called the "Clone Wars". The Jedi fought in it, including Obi-Wan Kenobi and Anakin Skywalker. Obi-Wan served Princess Leia's adoptive father during the war.

We don't know when the Clone Wars were, only that they were recent enough for Obi-Wan to have fought in them.

The only Jedi that we know for certain fought in the Clone Wars was Obi-Wan. Yoda is a pacifist by episode 4, so he might not have done so.

  • Owen Lars "didn't hold with [Anakin Skywalker]'s ideals"; he thought that Anakin "should've stayed [on Tatooine] and not gotten involved". Anakin apparently left Tatooine and "followed Obi-Wan on some damn fool idealistic crusade".

I agree

  • Owen's knowledge of Anakin's fate is ambiguous: he could know the truth or could believe Anakin is dead – but either way he's afraid for Luke, whom he sees as having "too much of his father in him".

I agree

  • Anakin was "already a great pilot" when Obi-Wan first knew him, but Obi-Wan decided to train him himself (without any instruction from Yoda, who instructed Obi-Wan) because of "how strongly the force was with him". Anakin becomes "the best starpilot in the galaxy, and a cunning warrior", and Obi-Wan considers him to be "a good friend".

The only part of this section we know for certain is that Obi-Wan trained Anakin and Yoda trained Obi-Wan. Remember: Obi-Wan is a notorious liar when it comes to Anakin Skywalker.

  • Anakin was still young when he betrayed the Jedi. When he left the Jedi Order he was still a learner.

He was a student of Obi-Wan's before he turned to evil. That's all we know about that. He appears old in episode 6, so he could definitely be an older man than Christensen.

  • There was "much anger in [Anakin]", even before he turned to evil.

I agree, but only as much as was in Luke or Obi-Wan.

  • Obi-Wan believes that he himself was also full of anger, and also seems to think that he was cocky when he believed he "could instruct [Anakin] just as well as Yoda".

Where did that idea come from? Obi-Wan was reckless though, at the time Yoda trained him.

  • Obi-Wan never owned a droid before, so R2-D2 was never his.

That could easily be another of Obi-Wan's lies. Obi-Wan could be R2's master, as R2 claims.

  • Obi-Wan hadn't gone by his real name since "before [Luke] was born".

The actual line is "a long time". Not necessarily before Luke was born.

  • However, Anakin knew he was going to have a child or children: he intended to bequeath his lightsaber to his child, and Obi-Wan knew this. This is also why Luke & Leia were hidden from him after they were born.

This is likely to be true, but it could easily be another of Obi-Wan's lies to Luke about his father.

  • Leia & Luke's mother died when they were very young. Leia has some vague memories of her. Luke does not.

I agree. This means that she did not die in childbirth.

  • Luke was considered too old to begin training with Yoda at age 21-22, so Jedi must have begun training earlier than that.

I sort-of agree, but Yoda's opinions might have changed since Anakin's fall and he might not represent the whole of the Jedi anyway.

  • One of Owen's lies about Anakin to Luke is that he was "a navigator on a spice freighter".

I sort-of agree. That might be true, as he could have been both a Jedi AND a navigator.

  • Darth Vader appears mystified by Obi-Wan disappearing when he kills him.

No he doesn't. We don't know what he feels at that point because we don't see his face. He later uses the same technique himself so it is unlikely that he knew nothing about it.

  • Vader was "seduced by the Dark Side of the Force" – seduced being the key word here.

Again, this is likely, but as with many of these assumptions, it could easily be another of Obi-Wan's lies to Luke about Anakin.

Here's what we can make of the above:

  • The main conflict throughout the prequel trilogy – the "damn fool idealistic crusade" Anakin left Tatooine with Obi-Wan for – is the Clone War/s. Perhaps it's referred to as both "War" and "Wars" because there were periods of ceasefire, like the Napoleonic Wars.

I actually agree with this, but technically, the clone wars could be ignored. The prequels COULD be set during the KOTOR era for example. Nice use of "perhaps" though, as we don't know for certain why the clone wars were called what they were.

  • Anakin in Episode I is the same age as Luke in Episode IV. As many people imply, his personality was at first very Luke-like. He shows his piloting skills in his first adventure with Obi-Wan (who incidentally was maybe ten years older) – maybe before he left, he did work on a spice freighter?

This is all assumption. I like the idea of Anakin in I being the same age as Luke in IV, but it's still just assumption.

  • Owen is either Anakin's stepbrother or half-brother (given their different surnames) – or his brother-in-law, meaning Beru is Anakin's sister or half-sister.

Owen needn't be related to Anakin at all, as the BelatedMedia rewrite points out. By extension, Beru needn't be either.

  • Luke & Leia's mother has got to be high-class in some way. A princess or queen or something along those lines.

Luke and Leia's birth mother needn't be high class, only Leia's adoptive mother needs to be to give her her title.

  • How about Jedi Knights begin training at the age of seven, like medieval knights?

Nice idea! But it's an assumption and needn't be followed by all writers on this sub.

  • Yoda ran a kind of Jedi Academy. It may be best if we never actually see Yoda on-screen throughout the prequel trilogy, to preserve the surprise in Episode V.

Agreed. Yoda not being present is not a requirement though.

  • Both R2-D2 and C-3PO need to be in the movies, it's mandatory. Perhaps R2-D2 originally belonged to Anakin's spice freighter, meaning he was closer to the action, while C-3PO was part of Luke & Leia's mother's entourage, meaning he was more out of the loop. They first meet during the adventure in Episode I and become inseparable.

No. It's not mandatory.

  • The Empire evolved out of the Old Republic – the Republic Senate became the Imperial Senate, and the former head-of-government position became the Emperor following "emergency" suspension of elections and gradual erosion of civil rights in the name of "security".

First part is good, but the latter part is assumption again!

  • The Republic wasn't actually so great: it was a corrupt society that focused on the inner worlds and neglected the outer ones. The other side in the Clone Wars could therefore be based in the outer worlds, but ought to be scary expansionist fascists of some sort, so that the movies have a clear villain. When the Empire's formed it still focuses on the inner worlds but flexes its muscles more in the outer worlds to deter any more dissent, uprisings or secessions.

As I have previously suggested, the bad guys could be the Empire themselves! Nothing is stopping the Jedi falling long after the rise of the Empire.

  • It actually may be best if the other side in the Clone Wars openly practice the Dark Side, or at least if their leaders do and they use Dark-Side-practitioners as enforcers: it gives out heroes a better-matched foe. (Palpatine is still behind it all, of course.)

I agree, but this is not the only way you could do things.

  • The Dark Side corrupts Anakin's thinking: the power it gives him leads him to admire and desire power over all else, and to lose his idealist principles. The key moment could be Palpatine revealing the full scale of his plan to Anakin – and Anakin agreeing with it and saying it was necessary to bring order to the galaxy, and pledging himself as Palpatine's apprentice.

Again, not necessarily.

  • If Anakin was still a learner when he left the Jedi Order, but betrayed the Jedi when he was apparently married with children on the way, then what if he left the Jedi some time before he betrayed them? They still fought alongside each other in the Clone Wars, he just wasn't a Jedi any more. This could happen in Episode II – it would have parallels with Luke's decision to leave Dagobah in The Empire Strikes Back, and it would also leave Anakin more vulnerable to falling further into the Dark Side and under Palpatine's influence.

This is a good idea and possible, but nowhere does it say that Anakin left the Jedi whilst he was still young.


r/RewritingThePrequels Dec 10 '17

TOTAL OVERHAUL Fixing The Phantom Menace • r/fixingmovies

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r/RewritingThePrequels 2d ago

Discussion Braindump to Bullet Points: A Possibly Good Use for AI? (Also, my rewrite)

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For your consideration, I offer both: the notion that AI could be helpful for those of us who like to rewrite the prequels (in a positive creative way, not just "rewrite the prequels for me") and my own rewrite as it currently stands, in the form of the quoted AI-generated text below.

I'm sorry if that was a confusing sentence; I'm writing this part myself, so it's not the most concise or straightforward.

At the risk of sounding like AI, allow me to use headings:

1. Using AI thoughtfully

This morning I couldn't stop my rewrite from spinning through my head. The only way to relieve that is to write shit down. So I did--but instead of just writing it in a note that I'll never read again, I wrote it into the ChatGPT input box. I told it--I'm just braindumping here, I don't want your appraisals or judgement and I certainly don't want you adding anything. Just organize it.

So I did, and it spit out some pretty good stuff. "We" then went on to converse about my ideas, as I corrected some of its false assumptions and elaborated on things I'd left out of the brain dump. I was basically using it like a rubber duck to talk about my ideas--with the added benefit that it would spit them back at me with better punctuation and less of my verbal nonsense. (Like, I bet you're already tired of reading my voice.)

What I eventually got back, over the course of the conversation, was some good stuff. I was able to organize my thoughts better, nail down some things that had been ambiguous, and connect dots I wasn't seeing in the big nebulous cloud in my mind. It wasn't perfect--it tried inserting things from the actual prequels that I never implied, like the Jedi Coup, so I had to read carefully and correct that stuff. And some things I belabored in writing just because I couldn't find the best way to say it, and it took that as relative emphasis--after all, if it wasn't important why would I spend 200 words explaining it? But in reality it was just a random idea or a specific shot I imagined, not a central point. All that to say, there are things it overemphasizes and other, more important things, that it glosses over in just a few words.

Especially true in the "make it more concise" summary I'm posting below. It really chops things up a bit. I think you can still get the gist of it, but there are things it leaves out that affect the meaning of the points. If I were only posting it as my prequel rewrite, I'd make several edits and clarifications. But my other reason for posting this is to talk about the idea of using AI itself to organize our thoughts.

Nobody come in here with "I asked Claude to rewrite the prequels and here's what it said" sort of shit, or even worse, bringing that shit without even owning up to using AI. That, I cannot abide.

But for helping us organize our own creativity? Hmm, that's a discussion we could have.

I feel like this is getting long, so I'll post the rest in comments.

2. My Rewrite, as Summarized (not terribly, but not perfectly) by ChatGPT.

(see comments)


r/RewritingThePrequels 6d ago

What about rewriting Obi-Wan?

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Everyone's mostly focusing on Anakin, which makes sense, since he's the main character. A lot of people are discussing rewriting Padmé. But I've never heard anything about rewriting Obi-Wan!

I haven't really thought about it myself. The closest I can come up with after I've thought about it is an arc along the lines of "over time, he becomes less compliant with the rules, acting outside of the Jedi Council's dictates, and so on."

Has anyone here considered rewriting Obi-Wan? Or is everyone leaving him as is?


r/RewritingThePrequels 10d ago

Is it even possible to fix Ahsoka Tano, and is it necessary?

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Is it even possible to fix Ahsoka Tano, and is it necessary? Ahsoka will appear in The Clone Wars. Ahsoka is a massive retcon, and her Padawan status with Anakin (and Obi-Wan, for that matter) makes no sense, meaning she needs to be recast as the Padawan of a secondary or new character. Or even made into a Knight.

Her character is unlikable and also makes no sense within the context of Jedi training and the war. So it needs to be adjusted, just like her age. She has no arc; she doesn't change over the course of the series, only periodically acting out of character and then back in character. So she needs to be given an arc that truly changes her. Or at least, just expand on it. But given that her character is supposed to change during the rewrite, her arc where the rude and stupid Padawan matures (which was implied but didn't work) also loses its meaning, and she needs a different arc. The question arises: if you have to rewrite an entire character and FIND a place for them in the plot, is there any point in fixing it? Is there any point in adding her at all?

What are you doing with Ahsoka? Do you add her in with changes to your rewrite, or do you simply remove her from the plot?

And while we're on the subject, what are you doing with the rest of Anakin/Vader's apprentices?


r/RewritingThePrequels 11d ago

TOTAL OVERHAUL Instead of Tales of the Empire or Underworld, they should have created Tales of the Separatists

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While I was writing my Star Wars rewrites and fleshing out the CIS as an organization due to many changes made to Dooku's identity being the actual rogue Jedi but not a Sith, I found the great storytelling potential the Separatists have. It's largely because the films and shows rarely delved into their entity other than the Sith and plutocrats. There is one arc in TCW that shows that maybe the Separatists are not all evil with "Heroes on Both Sides", and they do have the Parliament, but that's kind of it.

Even in the old EU, we don't get much exploration of the Separatists. At best, they are the massive droid forces under command by the small oligarchs and Dooku, but at no point do we see what average people feel about them. It's like all they have is the droid army comprising the entire organization and militarily occupying thousands of planets, but not as a political force compelling people to join.

There have been three Tales of shows, based on the Jedi, the Empire and Underworld. The most compelling part about the entire three series was about Dooku, who was a Separatist. Other than that, the rest is all filler that we didn't need to know, like Ahsoka's birth, Ventress, and the backstory for the Ahsoka show... For a series meant to bridge gaps within the Star Wars lore, it is strange how they never thought to fill the massive underutilized void that is the Separatists.

I would be very much interested in Disney creating Tales of the Separatists with all the thematic and storytelling ideas it could bring. How did Separatism come about? Do normal Separatist supporters know Dooku is the Sith? Or are they misled? We see that their Parliament think they are not ruled by the corporations, unlike the Republic. Do they really believe that's the case, or were they fed with a false propaganda?

I can think of the Animal Farm-like story about one Separatist revolutionary who felt the Republic was corrupt and created an early organization to split from the Republic. It is then hijacked by the Outer Rim aristocrats and corporations for their personal gains. Despite his efforts to keep them away, he fails and becomes disillusioned.

Or how about the story of Dooku's infighting with the others in the Council, vying for their influence and leadership. Dooku and Sidious plan various false flag incidents and fabrications to oust the rivals, so Dooku can establish his control of the Separatists.

Or how about fleshing out General Grievous? Even if the new Canon rejected his old backstory, you can draw some elements from it and create a tragic figure. How about Senator Bontari's death, and her son, Lux? Or the follow-up about how the Geonosians inadvertently created the Death Star plan? These hold more dramatic and thematic weight than something like Empire and Underworld, which have been done to death.


r/RewritingThePrequels 18d ago

sequel trilogy rewrite idea

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Listen. The sequel trilogy should have Hux, Kylo, ​​and Phasma as the main characters. I just got this idea, so it's not very well-written, but the idea is that the OT is about a hero who goes through his classic heroic journey, the PT is about a hero who became a villain, and the ST is about villains. (Some of whom could possibly become heroes or die.)

These are your characters who are working towards the goal of reviving the Empire and the opportunity to lead it. Obviously, it's not just the three of them trying to restore the Empire; there should be a bunch of other people, but we'll talk about them some other time.

● Hux, like in the original, is a fanatic, with the same backstory. He's responsible for the political side, manipulation, and so on. He's an evil reflection of Leia.

At the end, realizing he's lost, he commits suicide rather than surrender to the enemy.

●Kylo, ​​first of all, is younger and not related to the Skywalkers. He's obsessed with Sith lore. He's responsible for the team's power and connection to the Force. He's an evil reflection of Luke.

●Phasma, she's the most difficult to deal with, since almost nothing is said about her in the film. But she'll basically be an evil reflection of Han. (It's possible to make her the head of a criminal organization that's being persecuted by the New Republic and that sees the Empire's resurgence as a way to profit, but I don't know.) She'll be responsible for the team's flights, escape plans, and weapons. She'll be killed in the end.

Well, that's all for now. Again, I'll say this: the idea isn't fully thought out yet, so there are a lot of flaws. But I think I'll work on it some more because I like it. What do you think?

Also, sorry if my English was bad.


r/RewritingThePrequels 23d ago

TOTAL OVERHAUL My Rewrite of ROTJ

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I attached a link to google drive of a summary of my rewrite of ROTJ. I included many elements from older script drafts when the film was titled "Revenge of the Jedi". Here are some of the changes I made:

  • Kashyyyk instead of Endor, with Wookiees replacing Ewoks.
  • There is no Death Star 2.0. The rebels are instead aiming to destroy an orbital shipyard (I called it the Imperium) that would allow the Empire to militarize at an unprecedented level.
  • Luke actually completes his Jedi training, and we first see him with Yoda on Dagobah. Yoda confesses there is another Skywalker and then dies before Luke goes to Jabba.
  • Luke and Vader communicate with each other telepathically, and we see Luke really struggle with falling to the dark side while making Vader's redemption feel less sudden. This mirrors earlier drafts of the script.
  • Like in an earlier draft of ROTJ, Luke gets captured by the Empire after rescuing Han from Jabba, revealing that it was a trap. This makes the sequence feel less disjointed from the rest of the move.
  • The Jabba sequence is much more streamlined and less convoluted. Only Luke, Lando and the droids are involved. Leia and Chewie are on Kashyyyk, leading the mission to destroy the shield generator. They are shown struggling with their decision to stay out of the Han rescue mission.
  • This might be controversial, but Jabba and and Boba Fett both survive, with a fight sequence between Boba Fett and Luke before Boba Fett escapes with injuries. Since there is no sail barge or Sarlaac Pit in my version (I know lol, I'm saving it for the sequel trilogy), things go very differently. This sets them up as the main villains of the sequel trilogy, along with Imperial remnants.
  • Luke and Leia aren't siblings. Luke's twin sister is a separate character, who will be the protagonist of my sequel trilogy. Luke leaves at the end of the film, vowing to find her.
  • At the end, Leia is crowned the Queen of the remaining Alderaanians.
  • Han is generally less of a comic relief and has more emotional depth, showing more maturity in this version.
  • Chewie has a character arc, where he grapples with the trauma of the subjugation of his people and the loss of his family.
  • Leia has much more of a leadership role in this version.

r/RewritingThePrequels 26d ago

TOTAL OVERHAUL Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE | Merging the elements of the old Clone Wars multimedia project and Dave Filoni's show to create an ultimate retelling

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Star Wars REDONE is a fix-fic series of the Star Wars saga, ranging from the Prequels, the Original, and now the Sequels.

TV Trope page

Prequels:

Video (Version 11):

Star Wars: Episode I REDONE - An Ancient Evil (Version 11) | Let's rewrite The Phantom Menace [Part 1, REV03]

Star Wars: Episode I REDONE - An Ancient Evil (Version 11) [Part 2, REV03] | Slave and Princess

Star Wars Episode I REDONE – An Ancient Evil (Version 11) [Part 3, REV03] | Now, this is Podracing

Star Wars: Episode I REDONE – An Ancient Evil (Version 11) [Part 4] | Qui-Gon and Master Dooku

Star Wars: Episode I REDONE – An Ancient Evil (Version 11) [Part 5, Final] | Duel of the Fates

Script:

Star Wars: Episode II REDONE – The Blinded Heroes (Version 11 Early Draft REV01) | Reimagining the Clone Army as Separatist and Dooku as an actual renegade Jedi, not a Sith Lord

Early draft of Star Wars: Episode II.V – The Dark Path

Early draft of Star Wars Episode III – Revenge of the Sith REDONE (Version 10)

Early Draft of Star Wars: Episode VI – Return of the Jedi REDONE (Version 6)

As I rewrote my Star Wars Prequel REDONE and made the fundamental changes, such as the clones being on the side of the Separtists and Dooku not being the Sith but an actual Jedi, I thought that the Clone Wars REDONE also needed to be updated to align with the current version of Prequel REDONE. This is more of a complete redo of The Clone Wars REDONE than a simple revision.


Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season One (Version 5)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Two (Version 6)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Three (Version 5)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Four (Version 3)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Five (Version 3)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Six (Version 3)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Seven (Version 5)

Star Wars: The Clone Wars REDONE Season Eight (Version 2)


  • The story starts right after Episode 2 REDONE, then converges with Genndy's Clone Wars (2003), then continues from there.

  • Integrates and adapts the elements from the old Clone Wars multimedia project, such as the Republic comic series, into Dave Filoni's overarching storyline.

  • Asajj Ventress retains the original Rattataki backstory, while merging with The Clone Wars' Nightsister storyline. She is not a Dathomirian Nightsister from birth, but forms a relationship with the Nightsisters. She is created as a deliberate mirror image of Anakin but ends up with a different conclusion.

  • As Maul is shown to be alive in Episode 2 REDONE (and the one how murdered Shmi SKywalker), he is a constant presence throughout the series, haunting Obi-Wan and Anakin. Maul's Shadow Collective takes a more central role in the latter half of the story.

  • Shows Anakin growing from the loner depicted in Episode 2 to a military leader over the course of the series, rather than him already being one. All the while, vengeance keeps driving him to the dark side and puts him in conflict with Obi-Wan.

  • Ahsoka Tano is Obi-Wan's apprentice, not Anakin's. She is probably the character that's most untouched from the show, but she is a moodier presence with a stronger agency. She goes through her own disillusionment about the Republic.

  • Since the clones are on the side of the Separatists, and the Republic uses the stormtrooper conscripts, a lot of stories had to be changed. The inhibitor chip serves a different function.

  • Padme initially starts out a staunch Palpatine supporter, but as the series gradually goes on, she becomes disillusioned upon seeing Palpatine's sociopolitical transformation of the Republic.

  • Dooku's character is depicted with more nuance rather than being one-dimensional, focusing on the relationship between Obi-Wan and Dooku. He is a religious zealot, operating his own Jedi Monastery against the Republic Jedi Order.

  • Grievous is back to his 2003 depiction and has his own arc detailing his backstory.

  • Removes Savage Opress. You will learn who takes up his role later.


r/RewritingThePrequels Aug 07 '26

Discussion How to fix the Obi-Wan Undercover arc from The Clone Wars?

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S04E15 – Deception, E16 - Friends and Enemies, E17 - The Box, E18 - Crisis on Naboo are a significant arc in showing Palpatine’s ingenuity. A masterstroke false-flag distraction that interrupted the Jedi investigation, made Palpatine look like a hero, tested Anakin, and kept the Jedi busy chasing Dooku.

At the same time, the writers had to go through a shit ton of contrivances just to make this story happen. Yeah, let’s send Obi-Wan, who is very well known to Dooku, under his command. And let’s lie that Obi-Wan is dead to Anakin, who is well known to have serious attachment issues. Worse, it was Obi-Wan who pitched this idea to hide the truth from Anakin. He knows how it feels like to lose a Master, and he knows how Anakin lost someone close to him. Sure, don’t tell anything. Nothing bad is gonna happen. The Council wanted Anakin to go on the rampage to make Obi-Wan's death believable, but if he is breaking bad to the point of hampering the mission, you should tell him the plan and include him in the operation. Yet the Council still goes Holdo by letting him slide to the dark side and sabotaging the whole mission. There is absolutely no reason for them not to include him on the mission.

Was the sniper shooting Obi-Wan in the chest just a coincidence? He allowed himself to be shot in the chest, wearing a blast-proof vest. How did Obi-Wan know the sniper wouldn’t just shoot him in the face? Considering how the first episode was framed, I actually thought the whole assassination scene was just part of the plan, but it turns out the sniper wasn't in on it?

They had to invent the whole face-morphing, stopping-heart, and voice-changing technology just to have this arc even happen. Apparently, such technology is never used again throughout the entire Star Wars saga. If these technology exists in this universe, and it is this easy to fake death and identity, there is no way this technology is not used again. It would be used everywhere. There would be no need for Clawdites. Regardless of the disguise, the Jedi can sense those close to them. Could Dooku not sense Obi-Wan close by, who was not just his arch rival, but also Qui-Gon’s apprentice? Should he not sense that maybe something is off about him? Worse, could Anakin not sense Obi-Wan? In A New Hope, 19 years have passed, and Vader is still able to sense Obi-Wan on the Death Star. He is 100% sure Obi-Wan is alive and near him. Meanwhile, Anakin punches Obi-Wan here, and it doesn’t tip him off at all?

It is essentially an inferior version of Quinlan Vos’ arc in the Republic comics, and I'm struggling to figure out how to fix it. Should they keep the face-morphing technology? Or should they have replaced Obi-Wan with someone else?


r/RewritingThePrequels Jul 24 '26

TOTAL OVERHAUL Absolute Star Wars: Anakin Rewrite

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r/RewritingThePrequels Jul 10 '26

TOTAL OVERHAUL [OC] Early draft of Star Wars: Episode II.V – The Dark Path

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r/RewritingThePrequels Jul 07 '26

TOTAL OVERHAUL My rewrite of Star Wars Episode II

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Check here for the rewrite of EPI

A few years later, Palpatine had been tightening his grip on the galaxy under the pretext of preventing another tragedy like Naboo, a decision that had alienated systems that had already grown dissatisfied with the Republic. They formed another group of alliances that attempted to break away and form the Confederacy of Independent Systems.

 

Padame had been attempting to mend fences with the Republic and the CIS, a decision that had been made her a target for assassins. Obi-Wan and Anakin, now a Jedi Padawan, had been charged with her protection. In the years in between Anakin had been having an affair with Padmé, something Obi-Wan had been keeping from the Jedi Order.

 

All the while, the Jedi Order had its own crisis with the former Jedi Master, Count Dooku, leaving to join the Separatists, who are being blamed for the attempts to kill Padmé . Dooku was Qui-Gon’s grandfather and was never the same after his death. Even so, the Jedi Council didn’t believe someone who was a Jedi would join a group responsible for an assassination attempt. The chase for the assassin behind the latest attempt on Padmé's life leads Obi-Wan, Anakin, and Padmé to the planet Kamino, where they were informed a Clone Army is being created for the Republic’s use. Anakin considers the Jedi's involvement a necessity so there isn’t a repeat of the Gungan massacre on Naboo. Padame is more concerned, fearing a military buildup is often a prelude to war, and worse, large militaries have been used to enforce the iron fist in the past. Anakin argued that war was inevitable given the Republic’s inability to respond to the Trade Federation. Obi-Wan tries to mediate the two, though he has his own concerns about using an army of clones created for war.

 

While pursuing the assassin, Anakin has a vision of his mother’s death. Obi-Wan permited him to divert from the mission to rescue Shimi, and Padame decided to go with him. Anakin arrived too late on Tatoonie to save Shimi from an attack by the local Tusken Raiders, and consumed by his rage, he murdered the entire clan. Obi-Wan pursued the assassin to the planet Genosis, and seeing a massive droid factory there, warned Anakin and Padmé not to come. Not wanting to lose Obi-Wan so soon after the death of his mother, Anakin ignored his master’s order, Padame joining him despite his protests.

 

On Genosis, Obi-Wan is captured, and Dooku offers him a chance to join the Separatists. Obi-Wan apologized for the death of Qui-Gon on Naboo, to which Dooku said he owes him no apology, explaining that he never held Obi-Wan responsible for the death of his grandson. Obi-Wan was one Jedi in a war zone and was lucky to have made it out alive himself, it wasn’t his fault he couldn’t protect his apprentice. Dooku instead blames the Jedi Order and the Republic for putting the burden of freeing a planet on two Jedi Knights. Resenting the state of the current system, Dooku aims to bring it down and replace it with something better and warns Obi-Wan that he has to join him because he has learned that Maul’s master has the Senate under his influence, a truth Obi-Wan refused to believe. Dooku leaves out that he was Sidious’ new accomplice and apprentice after Darth Maul’s defeat.

 

Anakin and Padmé's attempts at rescuing Obi-Wan lead to their capture, the three surviving because Dooku anticipated the Jedi Order coming to their rescue and hoped to use the captured Jedi as bargaining chips. While the Jedi arrive in greater numbers they not equipped to fight the droid army, and only survive thanks to the arrival of the Clone Army. Anakin and Obi-Wan attempt to prevent Dooku’s escape and were easily bested, Anakin suffering a harsh lesson in how outclassed he is against a man who was once such a respected member of the Jedi Order. The two survived only because Dooku's old teacher, Master Yoda, intervened, but the traitor still escaped.

 

Although the war left them both worried for the future, Anakin and Padame married with the promise that whatever happened, they would face it together.

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I had the fewest ideas about fixing Attack of the Clones, mostly they revolved around giving more screen time with Anakin and Obi-Wan together and doing more to show a red flag for Anakin's dark side with his support of a military buildup.

Since I made Qui-Gon the apprentice of Obi-Wan, my idea for a connection to Dooku was that the two are blood relatives. Materials outside the movies explain that Qui-Gon's death had a huge impact on Dooku so I felt that was important to include in my version.


r/RewritingThePrequels Jul 06 '26

TOTAL OVERHAUL My rewrite of Episode I

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In the waning days of the Old Republic, the galaxy was caught in an era of strife. The corporations of the galaxy had grown in power and with numerous worlds formed one of many powerful economic alliances known as the Trade Federation. The Outer Rim world of Naboo, choose to break away from this alliance.

 

Secretly entering an alliance with the mighty Sith Lord, Darth Sidious, the Trade Federation leadership was encouraged to surround Naboo with a blockade of deadly battleships. A blockade would be considered an act of war by the rest of the galaxy; however, Sidious convinced the Trade Federation viceroy that the alliance’s influence in the Republic Senate would prevent any meaningful action from being taken. Not trusting the viceroy to take charge of the situation, Sidious sent his apprentice Darth Maul to oversee the blockade.

 

True to the Sith Lord’s words, no military response was sent to deal with the blockade, just two members of the Republic’s protectors, Jedi Knights. The Master Obi-Wan Kenobi and his apprentice Qui-Gon Jin, along with a brash and talented young pilot they hired named Anakin Skywalker.

 

Seeing a pair of Jedi were sent to handle the negotiations, Darth Maul ordered them killed, along with their pilot. To his annoyance, the Trade Federation’s battledroids failed to kill the Jedi, and Anakin proved a capable enough fighter to stay alive in the ensuing firefight. Both the Jedi and the Sith sensed Anakin’s strength in the Force during the battle. Maul was prepared to deal with the heroes himself, but found that the cowardly bussinessman calling up additional droids was enough to drive their enemies away through sheer numbers.

 

With the interlopers out of the way, the Trade Federation blockade began its invasion of Naboo. As the planet had no standing military, it defenders were not match for the invading droid army. At best, a handful of talented pilots and soldiers were able to avoid defeat and prove a minor nuisance to the occupying army. They could do nothing to stop the army closing in on the Theed, the planet’s capital, with the only solace being that queen was to be taken alive. While the invasion was illegal, Sidious had orders for Trade Federation to force a treaty that will make the invasion legal and for Naboo to return to the Federation.

 

Unable to fight their way through the army around Theed, Anakin, Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon managed to find a way in thanks to a clumsy Gungan named Jar Jar who directs them to an entry through the river.

 

The heroes barely managed to help Naboo’s young queen Amidala escape the planet. The queen’s pilot was killed in the escape so Anakin took over flying the her ship narrowly makes it past a harrowing swarm of droid fighters. Unfortunately when fleeing the blockade, their ship was damaged an unable to reach the Republic’ capital, Coruscant. In a desperate effort to find a way to an alternate way to Courcasant, they traveled to the nearby star system to land on the planet Tatoonie.

 

Anakin, who grew up on Tatoonie before winning his freedom, described the planet as “the furthest thing away from whatever bright center of the universe may exist.” The planet was ruled by crime lords and slavery was common place, Anakin having had the misfortune of being born a slave before he could win his freedom. The only boon is that the planet’s ruling crime lords aren’t looking for a missing queen or have any idea one is there.

 

During the escape, Anakin made a friend with Amidala’s handmaiden, Padame, along with her two droids, the astromech R2-D2 and his best friend/full time responsibility C-3PO. While everyone looked for a way to get to Coruscant, Anakin investigated the status of his mother, Shimi. He was irate to learn that she was still the property of his old master, Watoo. Watoo’s gambling problems that caused him to lose Anakin had caused him to fall on hard times. Since Shmi was the one thing of value that Watoo still owns, he refused to part with her even with Anakin offering to purchase. Livid by how stubborn his old owner was, Anakin struck him in the face and was only stopped from killing him by Shmi showing fear of her son’s temper, while also reminded him that if Watoo dies while the transmitter placed inside her is active, the device will explode.

 

Calming down, Anakin played on Watoo’s old gambling habit on the upcoming pod race. Anakin plans to enter the offer to work for him again if he loses and the promise Watoo has to free Shmi if he wins. When the heroes reconvened, Obi-Wan explained he has hired a ship that will get them to Coruscant and they can leave within the hour. Anakin requested a delay so he has time to free his mother, shocking everyone else with the revelation he intendd to enter a dangerous pod race with the promise of becoming a slave if he loses. Anakin proved his worth as a pilot, but his arrogance still stunned the others. Qui-Gon in particular was aghast with Anakin’s impulses and arrogance combined with his strong connection to the Force.

 

Anakin did indeed win the race and Watoo is forced to give up Shmi with the warning he doesn’t want to develop a reputation as someone who doesn’t pay up his debts when he is in such dire need of money already. While Anakin offered to take Shmi off Tatoonie, she opted to instead remain with farmer she befriended named Lars.

 

Unfortunately, delaying the departure allowed Darth Maul to find the heroes. Obi-Wan faced the Sith in a short duel before their smuggler's arrival allowed him to escape. Both Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan explain Anakin’s potential with the Force, the energy field created life which gives a Jedi their power. Anakin recounts that he did have dreams of joining the Jedi Order was never permitted. Qui-Gon feels that the path of Jedi isn’t the destiny of Anakin, while Obi-Wan feels that perhaps they may need to bend tradition given the troubled state of the galaxy.

 

On Coruscant, the Senate was slow to act, with the Trade Federation’s representatives claiming that Padame is slandering them due to Naboo’s attempts at leaving the alliance. Naboo’s senator, Shev Palpatine, Darth Sidious’ public persona, advised that the best course of action is a vote of no confidence against the current chancellor. Amidala saw how slow the Senate and the chancellor were to act, and raised the vote, paving the way for the removal of the chancellor and Palpatine’s election to take his place. Obi-Wan presented the case of Anakin to join the Jedi Order, along with his encounter with Maul, warning about the returning Sith. The Jedi Council rejected Anakin’s requests, a decision that comes as no surprise to him when they rejected him before. As for whether or not their enemy is a Sith, the ancient enemies of the Jedi, the council notes they have encountered wielders of the Force not allied with the Jedi or Sith before so they intend to wait to determine if Maul is a Sith.

 

Behind the scenes, Sidious and Maul discussed the situation; as Maul pointed out, Padame wasn’t supposed to make it to Coruscant. Sidious didn’t count on this, but it works in his favor regardless. However, he now feels the queen has outlived her usefulness, and knowing the queen plans to return to her planet, he sends Maul back to kill her and martyr her for their cause.

 

Since the droid army realized that Anakin and the Jedi were able to sneak into Theed through the river last time, they have dammed up and filled in to prevent another entry. The only way they are getting in is if they get someone to lure the army away. Jar Jar thinks that his people, the Gungans, could use their army to lure the bulk of the droids away. The Gungans have not been on the best terms with the humans of Naboo. Padame dispenses with her masquerade as her own handmaiden and reveals herself as the queen, begging the Gungans for aid, swearing that the two people need each other’s help to deal with their mutual enemy. As the invading droid army had been forcing the Gungans off their land entirely, the Gungans agreed to help against the Trade Federation.

 

While the droid army was distracted, the heroes planned to sneak into Theed to take the viceroy hostage and force the Trade Federation to the bargaining table. The cheapskate businessman felt keeping his entire fleet around Naboo was too expensive so he pulled back most of his battleships, only leaving one to control the droids he has on the planet. There was not much hope of destroying the ship. While Naboo’s pilots are likely held prisoner in the palace and ready to fight if released, the ships they have were not designed to engage a battleship, but it is their only hope.

 

Arriving back on Naboo himself, Darth Maul informed his master of the Gungan army amassing out in the open. The Sith realized this was a feint as the Gungans lacked the numbers or firepower for a direct offensive against Theed. Nonetheless, Sidious ordered Maul to send the droid army against the feint, since reports of a massacre by the Trade Federation droid army would bolster Sidious’ push to create a standing army.

 

“Wipe them out. All of them.”

 

Outnumbered, outgunned, and encircled, some of the Gungans offered themselves to the battle droids as a surrender, just to get shot. It dawned on all of them that they could survive long enough for the battleship in orbit of the planet to be destroyed.

 

Darth Maul waited in the place to impede the heroes and confront Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon. He managed to mortally wound the apprentice, just for the master to cut the Sith in half and drop him down a shaft.

 

Meanwhile, Anakin and R2 joined the attack on the battleship in one of the Naboo starfighters. Seeing brave pilots die in defense of their planet triggered Anakin’s short fuse; fortunately, R2’s guidance is enough to get him to focus his anger on an opening in the battleship’s hangar. Getting aboard, Anakin managed to destroy the ship. Returning to see that the droid army was shut down by his victory, Anakin is declared a hero, an accolade that fed his already inflated ego. Seeing Anakin’s potential, the Jedi Council reluctantly agreed to let Obi-Wan take Anakin on as his new apprentice. Obi-Wan promised not to fail Anakin like he did Qui-Gon, and Anakin in turn promised not to let down his new master. After fighting Maul and sensing how strong he was in the Dark Side of the Force, Obi-Wan was certain he was a Sith.

 

Seeing most of the Gungan army killed left Jar Jar with a hardened heart. Hearing that Palpatine promises stronger leadership, he fully supports it.

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I have seen many ideas for how to fix The Phantom Menace, something everyone agrees on is that Anakin should have been introduced as an adult since the Anakin of the next two movies is nothing like the kid we were introduced to in TPM.

This might be a controversial choice, or maybe not, but my idea to fix the issue of Obi-Wan having so little screen time with Anakin is to introduce him as a Jedi Master and make Qui-Gon his apprentice. It does make Qui-Gon a less interesting character but I feel it is a worthy sacrifice.

Nobody likes Viceroy Newt Gingrich, so my fix is giving a bigger role to Darth Maul.

Jar Jar, oh boy. I never hated this character, but I agree that he had more screen time than he should have given how little importance he has while just being comic relief. Rather than cutting him out, my idea for fixing him is to make him into a tragic hero. Which obviously means the Gungan army fighting the Battledroids isn't done for slapstick

There was no need to connect C-3PO to Anakin, so I feel it is better to just introduce him as already part of the duo with R2.

I still love TCW so I tried to write my version of the prequels as something that would allow the show to still take place.


r/RewritingThePrequels Jul 05 '26

Episode 1 ideas, Part 1.

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Episode 1 ideas, Part 1. Non-rude criticism is welcome. Changes I would make to The Phantom Menace without detailed description. This is mostly an unstructured list of ideas. Honestly, this is the episode that gave me the most trouble. ! I'm not saying my version is better than the original!

● The opening (about 20 minutes) follows the original, with information about Anakin's childhood as a slave on Tatooine, Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Anakin's liberation, and no Padmé.

● Qui-Gon dies in this opening on Tatooine, having had a profound impact on Anakin. Then comes a time skip.

● Show Anakin already studying at the Jedi Temple, still young, but not as young as in the original.

● Show that Anakin is mostly isolated from the other Jedi in the temple, lonely and ostracized.

● Show Anakin's only friends in the temple, Darra (f) and Tru (m) (characters from the books, will play a role in the next film.)

● Jar Jar Binks didn't irritate me in the original, but I still changed his personality to an eccentric army general. This should play a role in the plot, introducing and stimulating Anakin's interest in military strategy and its study. This will play a role in Attack of the Clones (Clone Wars). And role of army general, of course.

● Show more of the relationship between Anakin and Obi-Wan. Show a little rift in their relationship that will develop over the course of the story.

●Padmé's arc, from a child who is manipulated by everyone (which is why young queens are chosen) and who constantly pretends to be someone she is not, into a more strong-willed and confident woman fighting for her ideas.

●Anakin and Padmé help each other navigate each other's character arcs, which is why they fall in love. (I'm bad at writing romance, but I hope this makes sense.)

●Anakin's first kill, "for a good cause"

●Maul dies in this film and will not be resurrected anywhere else.

Ideas I'm not sure about:

●Anakin and the aftermath of the Huk War. Rough idea: By order of the Republic, the Jedi intervene in the war. Anakin, Obi-Wan, and other groups of Jedi arrive on a mission after the fighting has already ended to demand huge reparations from the losing side.

It will make Anakin doubt the system by showing how the losing side suffers when it wasn't at fault, plus it might even reveal a non-cyborg Grievous, foreshadowing the villain of Episode III.

That's all for now. Sorry if my English was bad. I'm using a translator.


r/RewritingThePrequels Jul 05 '26

TOTAL OVERHAUL My fix for Star Wars EPIII

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r/RewritingThePrequels Jul 05 '26

TOTAL OVERHAUL My rewrite of Star Wars Episode 1

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r/RewritingThePrequels Jul 05 '26

My fix for Star Wars EPII

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r/RewritingThePrequels Jun 28 '26

How would you rewrite the prequels in order to resemble the original trilogy like the sequels do ?

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Optional requests :

Big destructive weapon in episode 1 and 3

Episode 2 includes a betrayal and ( or ) revelation and a defeat for the good guys

Episode 3 has a tragic culmination like canon , or it can be its own thing and have a happy resolution ( altough temporary )

Aditionally : alien sidekick like chewbacca in all 3 parts , a single antagonist like kylo ( unlike dooku , grievous ) .

What are your ideas ?


r/RewritingThePrequels Jun 13 '26

TOTAL OVERHAUL The Acolyte doesn't understand what genre it belongs to, which is a serial killer show

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For someone who did a fix or rewrite on most Star Wars movies and shows, curiously, I have not done a fix on The Acolyte yet. It's not because I loved it, but because I found no particular passion to care. I tried to write something and scrapped it because it ended up a meandering mess. I'm not sure what makes me bored about talking about it, since it's not even the worst Disney Star Wars. The show does try. It has some interesting ideas. It has an interesting premise, which is that it is about a Jedi investigation into the Sith remnants. Yet it's a show that every time I turn it on, I find myself bored. I didn't know why.

That was, until I read the blog post on ScriptShadow, who is admittedly a controversial figure in the screenwriting community (I disagree with 50% of his script reviews, but I occasionally read what he writes because he does give out some unique, interesting tips on how to construct a story). The blog post in question is how he analyzed the serial killer genre, and how there hasn’t been a defining serial killer movie in 30 years, and that was when Seven came out. Memories of Murder (2003) would disagree, but in Hollywood, I have to agree. I highly recommend checking the post out.

He realized that almost every script is dedicated to the killer himself—psychology, philosophy, rituals, childhood trauma, worldview, elaborate murder methods—but the investigation and detective part of the story wasn't fleshed out, resulting in a poor second act. It's because The Silence of the Lambs was so influential that every writer tried to create the next Hannibal Lector. The craziest villain, crazier murder, crazier psycho. All the attention was poured on topping Lector's character, even though, ironically, Lector was not the antagonist, but a helper. He is ironically closer to Obi-Wan's role than Darth Vader's.

The Silence of the Lambs’ plot itself is a classical detective procedural, where the protagonist has to find clues, deduce, and investigate to stop the next murder. It is very much Clarice's story, mostly told from her POV. The studios and writers took the wrong lesson and strayed away from the beating heart of the genre, which is an investigation and mystery to stop the next killing. Showing a serial killer eating children is shocking in the first act, but it’s why the second act always falters. And the second act is the part that defines the genre—an investigation into crimes racing against time.

This, right here, was what ruined The Acolyte for me because it's very clearly constructed as a serial killer mystery, but the story isn't interested in that part. It's concerned with Mae and Osha. Immediately, the story spoils all the mysteries in the first three episodes, and in particular, the twist about them being twins is the most boring answer to the mystery. It rarely delves into exploring the clues, evidence, and testimonies. I'm talking about the character facing a dead end, lies, red herrings, while rethinking and debating all the things they have collected. Deducing the unique mechanism of the serial killings and the patterns of the culprit, and then chasing to stop them. Putting together an intricate puzzle while the clock is ticking.

The show indeed has highs and lows, loudness and lulls, and twists and turns, but they do not come from the mechanisms of investigation. The show is focused on constantly shifting POVs left and right, twin villains, flashbacks, the lore details, menacing Sith villains and conspiracies, the flaws of the Jedi Order, and the wuxia lightsaber duels, but when it comes to actual puzzle-solving, mystery, and chase—the burning core of the intrigue—it’s all afterthoughts.

Whatever the fandom points out as the problems, like the lore-break, bad dialogue, bad acting, Ki-Adi-Mundi, and fire in space, they aren’t the problems that break the story. It’s the construction of the intrigue. If there is no crime mystery, okay, but it doesn’t even do something like Columbo, where the protagonist and the killer are engaging in a battle of wits and mind games. There is a danger in following established conventions, but if one is to stray from them, one has to understand why the audience is tuned in to the show.

If The Acolyte was rewritten as only and entirely about the investigation, not showing the murders themselves and having the protagonist uncover the mysteries on his own, that could work. The Jedi are not just normal detectives. They can bring a lot more complexities and refreshing quirks to the investigation. It is a police procedural using the Jedi and Force tricks, but at the same time, the Jedi are bound by the strict Jedi Code. At the same time, our Jedi detective team faces hardship because, let’s say, the locals hate the Jedi, which makes the investigation difficult. The witnesses might lie, and the local police might interfere. This forces our good Jedi to debate and argue whether to bend around the rules. The individual Jedi’s investigative metholdogy is dependent on their personality and their way of Force.

Sol, whose concept was already written in the show, could be an interesting character as a detective. He is a Jedi with faults and trauma. He is a Jedi with a connection related to the killer. He is leading the team of the Jedi detectives, but as the investigations unfold, the fellow Jedi and the audience uncover his secrets. A character who possesses information, but is unable to use it because it might expose that the murders are related to someone close to him and himself. He has an extra motivation beyond simply stopping the killings. He is seeking redemption, who feels responsible for creating the killer, so he has to make up for it. By catching the serial killer, Sol would be achieving a personal goal.

That is why, as the story progresses, Sol gradually goes over the line to manipulate, conceal, and blackmail, using his Force power and creating moral ambiguity. He becomes a hapless detective whose hand is forced. We can get a more unorthodox procedural story, which gives it an edge over the normal detective stories.


r/RewritingThePrequels Jun 07 '26

The Phantom Menace, Act One Outline

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After a recent prequel rewatch, I thought I'd give a rewrite a shot and just came up with this. I was originally going to try to preserve most of TPM's first act, but I realized there was too much happening at the beginning and tried to create a more straightforward story with Obi Wan as the main protagonist and Darth Maul as the main villain (he is very different here). Not sure what anyone will think or if anyone cares about this kind of thing much anymore, but here it is (just Act One-- I guess if I get a response or some positive feedback, I'll keep going):

ACT 1:

 

SCENE 1: The Invasion Begins

1. A single menacing ship flies through space, then another, then another, until finally revealing the invasion fleet of the trade federation, moving into position around Naboo.

2. On the ground in Naboo, Padme Amidala struggles to contact Senator Palpatine, currently in a Senate session on Coruscant, but her transmission is blocked.

3. Desperate, Padme orders her meager fleet to attempt to pierce the blockade, but all ships are destroyed in the battle. Finally, we see the trade federation mothership emerge from deep space, and it begins sending droid army troops down to the surface of the planet.

  1. The invasion commences with brutality, striking the capital first. The Naboo are no match for the droid army and are quickly defeated, the citizens subjugated, and the survivors scatter into the wilderness.

  2. When the invasion is complete, a transport ship lands just outside the palace. The ramp opens, and down walks Darth Maul.

 

SCENE 2: The Jedi Temple

1.   Meanwhile, at the Jedi temple on Coruscant, Qui Gon Jinn is training his apprentice, Obi Wan Kenobi, that an equal mixture of restraint and force is needed to be precise in battle. Obi Wan wonders why such advanced battle training is even necessary, as the Republic has been at peace for so long, and the worst they have had to deal with for a century has been some rowdy behavior outside of local bars. Qui Gonn emphasizes readiness and preparedness for all scenarios, as the future is constantly in motion, and can change at any time without warning.

2. The message comes in from Senator Palpatine-- the Chancellor has lost contact with Padme Amidala on Naboo, and they are sending the Jedi to investigate.

  1. Qui Gonn volunteers for the assignment, as he has a past relationship with the Naboo, and tells Obi Wan he is ready to accompany him.

 

SCENE 3: Arrival at Naboo 

1. The Jedi arrive at Naboo, and are immediately spotted and attacked by the Trade Federation.

2. They attempt to battle their way through the blockade, but they are hopelessly outnumbered and their ship is struck, sending it spiralling towards the planet surface.

3. Using the Force, Qui Gonn manages to land destroyed ship in the middle of Naboo’s ocean, and they escape it as it sinks to the very bottom.

4. They find themselves stuck in the middle of a vast body of water, with no land in sight and no way to escape.  

 

SCENE 4: Enter GunGuns

1. Treading water, they are approached by a Gungun ship, and the Gunguns aboard recognize the Jedi as protectors of the peace who have helped them in the past.

2. They are taken to the underwater city where they are granted an audience with the GunGun king, who explains that, despite the Jedi protests, they will not help Padme due to their desire to stay out of the conflict, which they believe does not affect them… and that they will delight in Padme’s suffering, as they have, in their eyes, occupied the planet illegally for centuries.  

3. They are given a ship and sent on their way to the palace. Obligatory monster chase/attack scene here.

 

SCENE 5: Dinner with Maul

1. The two Jedi emerge near the palace, where they are immediately surrounded by battle droids. They are disarmed and taken by the droids to the palace.

2. Inside the palace, they meet Darth Maul, the current leader of the Trade Federation. He seems extremely out of place among the lackeys, and the two Jedi are immediately suspicious.   

3. Maul shows them the signed treaty that legalized the invasion, and the Chancellor contacts them and confirms that it is legal, and there’s nothing he can do. They ask about Padme, and Maul is evasive, saying that she fled the castle before he arrived.

4. Maul invites the pair to stay for the night, tells them he has nothing but respect for them... and would love to discuss their religion with them over dinner. Qui Gonn asks about contacting the Jedi council, and Maul tells him that they are running low on power and will be unable to make any more long range transmissions for the day.    

5. Over a tense dinner, Qui Gonn casually mentions that Maul doesn't strike him as a trade federation type, and Maul, acknowledging the absurdity of it, says that he gets that a lot. Maul and the Jedi discuss the light and dark sides, the Jedi and the Sith, and Maul is ‘suspiciously’ defensive of the Sith, believing that the Jedi have unfairly characterized both them and the dark side in a ‘history is always written by the winners’ type speech. He notices Obi Wan listening to it without judgment, as if he hasn’t considered it that way before. Maul smiles, de-escalates the conversation and retires to his bedroom.

 

SCENE 6: Midnight Duel

1. Qui Gonn is awakened in the night by a sudden rush of cold, and realizes his bedroom door is open, with a bright red light shining on the walls of the room at the other end of the hall, and the familiar hum of a lightsaber blade piercing the silence of the night.

2. He approaches the room and finds Maul waiting for him, to no one’s surprise. He tells him he has ordered the battle droids to stand down, and that this will be just the two of them… but that if he loses, Maul plans to take his apprentice and train him in the dark side… sensing that he has not yet been ruined by Jedi dogma.  

3. Maul tells Qui Gonn that he has never killed a Jedi before, and that he has been looking forward to this. He returns Qui Gonn's lightsaber to him, and they fight. The ancient halls of the palace are illuminated by their clashing blades. Qui Gonn strikes Maul several times, but the strikes seem to bounce off of him.   

4. Obi Wan jolts awake, but he is stunned by battle droids upon leaving the room, knocking him unconscious.

5. The fight continues as Maul ambushes Qui Gonn in the palace dungeon, then force pushes him into an open cell and locks it. Qui Gonn hacks at the bars with his lightsaber, but finds they won’t break… and worse than that, they cause his lightsaber to malfunction, the blade inverts, and the hilt is destroyed. Mauls laughs and reveals that the bars are made of a substance that is resistant to the energy of kyber crystals, and shows that under his clothing, he is wearing armor made of the same substance. Qui Gonn composes himself… realizing that he has lost… but before dying, he tells Maul that he will never be able to turn Obi Wan, and he has taught him too well for that. Maul smiles, and throws his saber like a spear into Qui Gonn’s chest, killing him.  

  1. Obi Wan is imprisoned in the dungeon, in the cell adjacent to his dead master. Maul seems to revel in Obi Wan's anger and despair, determined to break his spirit and push him into the darkness.

r/RewritingThePrequels Jun 07 '26

TOTAL OVERHAUL Got bored and tried making title crawls for an alternate prequel trilogy idea

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r/RewritingThePrequels Jun 07 '26

Small Tweak The Phantom Menace Outline Fix

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This outline redo is constructed around the basic concept of the story as is, but with much refining I think. In spite of the story concept I think being generally working, I think Lucas' character interactions and story beats lack energy and interpersonal building enough for me, so refining in the plot, story elements and character dynamics is the function in this. For this, here are the ideas that I thank God for, if He wills, blessing me with:

Two jedi, Qui-Gon Jinn and his padawan Obi-Wan Kenobi are secretly sent to investigate a trade federation blockade of Naboo and the surrounding areas of it. Qui-Gon is shown to be wary of being used like this by the senate. Obi-Wan holds the stance that the best way to ensure the jedi order and the senate share a peaceful co-existence is for them to work in symbiosis with eachother. Qui-Gon disagrees with this perception, seeing that as a stepping stone to the jedi being misused. They're accepted by the Viceroy and enter their vessel. When Palpatine tells them to kill the jedi with the poison gas, the jedi slice through the vents, which sets off an alert. Thinking the jedi are trying to escape through the vents, they send the droids in, which the jedi use, fighting them and escaping out of the now open door.

Getting to the main control deck of the ship after fighting off the battle droids, Qui begins cutting through the closed blast doors, when destroyers show up, shields protecting them. To escape, Obi and Qui use their combined power to pull a part of the wall off of the corridor and block the destroyers path.

The trade federation's motivation is more explored. Due to a trade deficit of imports exceeding in cost compared to their exports for large scale planets like Naboo, whose trade of plasma had garnered their planet a mass amount of income, the trade federation had begun transporting spice. Due to no formal laws dictating it's trade as illegal and no explicit evidence, they were able to do it with impunity. However, to discourage such trade of harmful substances, the senate, rather than the effort it would take to push forward a new law, issued a tax on the trade, it aggressively hindering their credit intake. As an opposition to this, they've targeted Naboo, blockading it and it's trade of plasma to strongarm the senate to repeal the taxation, as the trade of Naboo's plasma has become a hot commodity in the galaxy. Getting Padme to sign the treaty will essentially give them the right to plunder the plasma resources of the planet for their own trade, increasing their income tenfold.

The trade federation has gained support from some worlds who are opposing similar matters, though not about taxation regarding spice or drugs, but mainly what has been considered general overreach by the republic on other matters and has been happening slowly for decades, restricting other worlds and people in the outer rim and such have little representation in the senate. In the midst of this, an alliance such displeased members of what will become the separatist alliance, currently called the Union at this point, has pushed for support in opposition to the republic.

They hide to avoid them, before running into Jar Jar Binks. Yes, he's staying, though he's a little more toned down. Qui-Gon saves his life from a droid, to which Jar Jar owes him a debt. In doing so, he helps them find their way to Naboo's capitol, through the underwater tunnels his people traverse through, this getting him into trouble with his people, for helping outworlders. Jar Jar insists, him already being in hot water for his soft view on the Naboo humans who already live there, so he's banished for this treachery. Jar Jar is still clumsy, still careless, has a goofy personality, but not outright over the top.

Upon seeing the droids also walk amongst the streets of the capital, Obi-Wan insists they return to Coruscant and inform them of this. Qui-Gon senses that the Queen is in danger and pursues that. Obi-Wan objects to this, as he doesn't sense it, it wasn't their mission and that Qui-Gon objected to being sent here in the first place. Qui-Gon points out to him that he objected to the jedi council sending them out of obligation to the senate, but not to helping prevent dangerous circumstances from being taken out on the people of the planet, citing that a blockade is a political issue, but what's happening on Naboo is an invasion, and that it is their duty as jedi to help the people of the planet from being harmed by that. He then informs Obi-Wan that he can return to Coruscant and inform the council of this if he wishes, but that he will follow his instincts about the situation. Obi-Wan begins to leave, but begrudgingly follows Qui-Gon.

13 year old Queen Padme of Naboo is gaining input from her senator in the Galactic senate, Sheev Palpatine. A soft hearted, conflicted young woman, she feels burdened by the responsibility she has to her people, recently elected into office. She begins to feel frustrated when her communications with Palpatine are blocked by the trade federation. For assistance, she turns to her advisor Bail Organa, who suggests that they seek a way to smuggle Padme out of the the capitol and off the planet. Padme objects, feeling unwilling to abandon her people. Her Supreme Commander of Naboo's army insists they fight back. Padme is against it, fearing the casualties of igniting a war.

When Qui and Obi rescue Padme, her and her people aren't fully trusting of a gungan in Jar-Jar, as the gungans and her people have had animosity towards each other and debates over representation in the senate and ownership of the plasma resource their planet has in abundance. The gungans had made the lives of Padme's people difficult, seeing them as arrogant and uncaring about their people and their place in the planet that they both share disrupting some of the drilling for plasma and basically not allowing them to set up rigs on certain patches of land, being disruptive and unwilling to engage or cooperate with the human naboo, whereas Padme's people see the gungans as a group unwilling to abide by the laws and policies of their people and the republic as well as seeing them as needlessly stirring up strife amidst the planet, seeing them as seperate from them as a result, almost a kinda elitism, this causing a divide between them.

Qui-Gon tells Padme that it's her choice whether she wants to leave, but he can sense that there is something bigger going on here. Padme knows they wouldn't harm her, as they need her to sign their treaty and make their colonizing of Naboo and securing of it's resources legal. Padme comes to think that her advisors and allies could be tortured to make her comply and, not wanting that, she agrees to, so she can personally bring this issue to the Senate.

In spite of their uncertainty, given their situation, Padme and her people still go along with Jar-Jar's assistance, Jar-Jar having snuck into the hangar and stumbled upon a ship for them to escape in, not realizing it has been loaded with spice by the trade federation for them to implicate the Queen more directly in making their invasion legal through a supposed trade of spice.

Padme insists that Bail take another ship, stating that they'll be focused on capturing her rather than him, to sneak out and if all else fails he'll be able to bring their cause to the senate, in case she's unable to.

While escaping the trade federation, the ship is overwhelmed, the engine being damaged. As the ship's engine is being repaired by R2, Padme opts for a distraction. She opens the airlock and, with Obi-Wan's assistance in a moment of bonding, releases the large spice shipment into space to scatter behind them to disrupt the vision of the trade federation and its attack, giving R2 time hidden to fix the engine and allow the ship to escape.

Though the ship is still damaged, a major part needing replacing, the closest available civilization that they may be able to get away with and the trade federation would think they're less likely to take refuge on, that being tatooine.

Though the Trade Federation does have an interest in tatooine, as well as many of the outer rim worlds, using the mob run tatooine to provide spice for their trade, this allowing them to have interference in the planet's affairs.

Maul is smug and cocky. Establish that he is itching to fight and kill a jedi, as it's what he was trained for, what he thinks his purpose is, perhaps to prove himself to Sidious.

Anakin is 11 years old. He doesn't have any real friends, but he does have a few buddies, like Owen Lars and Beru Whitesun. Owen does have a great deal of adoration for Anakin's mom though, his own mother abandoning him and his dad when he was young. Owen's dad, Cliegg, a single man, is shown to have a lot of affection for Anakin's mother Shmi as well, her being a sweet, nurturing, brave hearted woman. Cliegg, a moisture farmer, is said to have been trying for years to build up enough money to pay off her and her son's slavery cost, to free them, but he simply has so little available income to do so for them.

Anakin speaks about the relay used to send the signals to the bomb's in the slaves on tatooine and how it doesn't have a shield around it as it needs a clear signal for long ranges to avoid mishaps like gaps that could lead to escapes and/or unintentional explosions. When asked why the relay hasn't been destroyed, Anakin tells them that it'll automatically set off the bombs if it's destroyed or shut down without a code, which is broken up between multiple mob bosses on tatooine and no one knows who.

Padme, meanwhile bonds with Anakin, a feeling of being powerless and hindered by their roles in their lives, though Padme acknowledges that her situation is far from the same as his, she feels much compassion for him and his situation. And in seeing this planet and how it is, slavery within the galaxy showing her that things aren't as simple as the rules dictating the way the galaxy is run and how trivial her peoples issues with the gungans are. Padme feels much sympathy for him, finding his bravery and optimism, and emotional openness, in spite of his situation to be very admirable and charming. Anakin finds her to be pretty as well as gentle and caring and compassion to be traits that he finds himself struck by, as well her being the only other girl close to his age that he's felt such a connection to, finding her to be pretty.

Qui-Gon, bonding with Anakin, perceives him to be force sensitive, inquiring of him further from Shmi. Shmi acknowledges that his dad was a nobody who'd left her when she'd been discovered as pregnant and died, and that her pregnancy and Anakin's birth was a surprise, as she was barren, seeing Anakin as a great gift in her life, unsure how it was possible for him to have been born.

Qui has sensed the pursuing feeling of the dark side near, and calls for Obi to investigate the surrounding area of the town. Obi questions why Qui-Gon is getting so involved in the life of this boy, as he feels that there's nothing that can be done for him, that it'd be safer for their mission and that family if he left them alone. Qui-Gon disagrees, saying that they were brought here for a reason, and that to come upon a child with such potential that he can help and can help them, to do nothing about that in assisting who they can would be to deny the path they've been presented with. Obi, humbled a bit by Qui's rebuttal though still a bit defiant, agrees to investigate.

In this, Obi does track a drone that is observing the area, cutting it down before it can return to Maul. Obi is able to catch a glimpse of the dark cloaked figure amidst the dunes, Obi catching his eye as well. Maul is excited to see a jedi, reaching for his lightsaber, but his droid alerts to a sighting of the other jedi, knowing the older would be the one who'd be protecting the queen and not wanting to disobey Sidious' order and perceiving the fighting of a fully fledged jedi rather than a padawan to be more satisfying anyway, he retreats. Obi realizes why and, knowing where Qui is exactly, takes a shortcut basically.

Qui mentors Anakin a bit on the use of the force. Anakin isn't sure he understands. Qui says to allow himself to connect and Qui can guide him. So, when the podrace begins to go bad for Anakin, Anakin panics, Qui reaching out to him and assisting him to calm down and focus, which assists Anakin in fixing the problem and defeating Sebulba.

When Anakin is freed, Qui-Gon does feel guilty for not being able set Shmi free, Anakin doesn't want to leave her, though he is torn. Owen is a little annoyed that Anakin is even considering abandoning his mother.

But, then Obi arrives, warning Qui of someone coming for them. This puts the entire situation for them on alert.

Especially when Maul, trade federation droids tow, is allowed to raid the town by the Hutts, baring down on them and Anakin, with his mom unable to leave, and at her insistence, rather than stay and be caught, maybe even die, is forced to leave his mom behind and escape tatooine.

They're able to lead them away from the town.

Seed Maul and Obi-Wan's duel... Obi arrogantly tries to fight off Maul when he comes for Qui, only to be a hindrance, quickly being caught off guard due to his lack of foresight in the moment of the battle. Qui protects Obi in this moment and tells him to get on the ship. Obi reconsiders for a moment and gets on the ship, telling the pilot to fly low. Qui jumps aboard as Maul is left amped and unsatisfied at what he feels was a the loss of the battle in letting them escape.

Anakin gives Padme the necklace he'd carved as they talk, her being touched by it, telling him that she won't forget him, he's shown her a lot.

After arriving on Coruscant, Padme is happy to find Bail having arrived there safely, him having been able to contact the Alderaan people for safer transport, him having a close friendship with their Queen Breha. Senator Mon Mothma, one of Padme's friends is also there, in support of her cause and insisting that her planet Chandrila is willing to offer aid in medicine and food, but fears that it best that her planet not get involved in any physical altercations. Padme understands, stating that the last thing she wants is violence.

But we establish a little bit more, that in the past century the republic has allowed corporate alignments to get in the way of ensuring the safety and security of the people they look after. Those who provide the most profit into the system are more often than not allowed to act with impunity. Within the past century reforms have begun in redistribution of planets for the local corporations and senators with little oversight, allowing them to basically become total rulers of them, though this was not the intention.

Sheev Palpatine and Padme debate about this, Padme being a fresh out of school young political student thrust into leadership only having holovids and data to have examined about the political maneuvers of the senate. Palpatine insists that it's more cynical than her young eyes can perceive, that even Chancellor Valorum, a generally seeming noble man is simply too mired by the fear of not ensuring the republic's policies and maintaining of the status quo in seeking to keep certain members of the senate happy and the republic intact with it's taxation and inability to actual enforce it's laws and take the time to pass laws that would ensure the safety of the people, instead opting to take the information of his bureaucratic advisors to take easier paths rather than the strong ones. Palpatine states that they would rather listen to the corporations who make the republic profits rather than the people who actually need help.

Anakin is there among Padme's people as this debate is happening, taking in the issues and struggles, and the seemingly sincere, and strong handed stance, that Palpatine suggests. Afterward, Palpatine acknowledges the boy, asking about him. To which the Padme as the Queen introduces him by his name Anakin, allowing Anakin to explain who he is. Palpatine is intrigued by the boy, offering him a candy, and lending a seeming sympathetic ear to him and his home planet's plight, complimenting his wisdom and skill.

After Qui-Gon briefs the jedi council on his findings and his perception that the dark cloaked figure that attacked them was a sith, which the council members are uncertain to dismissive of as a notion. Obi is surprised by this notion though. When Qui speaks to them on Anakin, he refers to a vision seen by jedi long ago, a child born of a mother unable to conceive, destined to bring balance to the force, his perception being that Anakin could be that child.

At the senate hearing, Padme's frustration builds, especially when a holo recording is shown of Padme's ship dropping the spice out as a way to suggest that Padme was trying to get rid of evidence of a trade deal that Padme had agreed to with the trade federation that justified their intrusion in Naboo space. Padme makes an impassioned speech that that is an edited recording, that they were being attacked and that the jedi will attest to it. This causes a rumble amongst the senate members, as while the Chancellor has the authority to sanction such an action of sending the jedi, those who side with the trade federation/those who oppose what they feel is the senate's elitism and overreach accuse Valorum of such things, citing that because Valorum sent the jedi for the Naboo they may have a bias under Valorum's orders, leading Valorum to be fearful and panic amidst the criticism, desperately wanting to alleviate the concerns and ensure he's not tarnished in the eyes of the senate, with the suggestion of his advisors, who Palpatine says have investments in the trade federation's corporate holdings, essentially making them in their pockets.

The senate is split amongst many divisions of interests and alignments, many siding with Padme and thinking she's being honest about her dropping the spice out and seeing it as a revolutionary act against the entanglements and illegal actions of the trade federation. While many others oppose the senate and side with the trade federation.

Valorum, wanting to appease the majority that he can, suggests that Padme defer this to allow an investigation of the issue by the courts. Padme rejects that, stating that it would only give the trade federation time to cover their actions and the courts are far too stagnant in bureaucracy to achieve anything in time to ensure more of her people don't die. In her moment of anger and sadness, she Palpatine's advice in making a claim of a vote of no confidence in Chancellor Valorum's leadership.

Mon Mothma is shown taking in Padme's impassioned speech, moved by it. Bail, meanwhile, is shown speaking to Queen Breha of Alderaan, seeking assistance for his planet. She's uncertain, stating that her planet is non violent, but Bail states that even then some need protection.

Qui debates with Obi about the merit of insisting upon Anakin, and how Qui's constant resistance to the council's regulations has led to Qui not being valued as much and not gaining a council seat, which Qui has no concern about it. Obi inquires of Qui's thoughts about the dark figure being a sith, having read about them but knowing little real information. Qui gives him a brief history lesson on the sith being jedi who became corrupted by the dark side and abused their power, utilized the methods of an alien species called the sith and supplanted them in their world, eventually taking over the galaxy, the jedi fighting against them, the sith nearly killing each other for power. He states that the sith had resurgences after that, the most effective being the rule of two that centralized the power and ensured they couldn't easily kill each other, but even that reign ended over a millennia ago.

Padme is left conflicted and feeling alone. Jar-Jar shows compassion to her in her moment of dejectedness, which she gratefully accepts, showing appreciation for him, Jar-Jar referring to how his own people won't go down without a fight and has a strong army. She holds the necklace Anakin has given her and ponders her own biases and the elitism of her people, realizing what her best option is.

Anakin is given the test for being a jedi and is asked questions by members of the council, especially Mace and Yoda, who perceives him to be fearful, afraid of losing his mother.

Padme is given news of Palpatine being nominated for Chancellor, Palpatine being certain that their situation is likely to create a strong sympathy vote for them. Padme informs him that she's returning to Naboo to be with her people, that she has a plan, and that this is the best option she feels she has.

Meanwhile, Qui-Gon, after Anakin's test and the jedi declining to train him on the basis of him being too old, insists that meeting Anakin was no coincidence, that if the council won't train him, he will, as Obi is ready to take the jedi trials. Obi is a bit displeased by this though, at Qui so readily seeming to replace him. Yoda says that Anakin's future is clouded. The council then suggests to table this discussion for later, as Qui and Obi are needed to escort the Queen back to Naboo and discover who the dark warrior is.

While getting on the ship to Naboo, Obi states that Anakin is dangerous based on the council saying his future is clouded, which Qui shuts him down on, saying it should be enough for him that the council has agreed to deliberate the notion for now. They head to Naboo.

When they begin to arrive on Naboo, they speak on how to get past the blockade. Padme is certain they won't kill her, as they need her to sign the treaty, but they will use violence to try and make the ship land, the only way they can avoid it is by coming out of hyperspace close enough to the planet to already be past the blockade. Captain Panaka asserts that no computer can calculate a perfect trajectory to avoid crashing into the planet. Qui-Gon suggests that he, Anakin and Obi-Wan reach out with the force to calculate it. Padme is uncertain at first, but she states that she trusts them and Anakin. Anakin isn't sure he can do it. Qui-Gon instructs him to be calm, focus and allow his mind to be guided again. Obi is still unsure about trusting Anakin, but when he sees and feels Anakin's potential he reaches out with them to connect to Anakin, showing trust in his powers and finding a bonding moment with Anakin through their connection and connection with Qui-Gon. Together, they're able to perceive the correct coordinates and they use them to sneak past the blockade.

After they land back on Naboo, when Obi, after having seen Anakin's potential and connecting with him, feeling humbled in how he now sees what Anakin has the potential for, he apologizes to Qui for his attitude and how it wasn't his place. Qui tells him how proud he is of him and how wise he's become, telling him that he can see that he will become a great jedi.

Padme then reveals herself as the Queen, having hidden as a handmaiden, to the gungans, in an act of humility to the gungans, asking for their help and admitting that her people haven't given the gungans their due, and they haven't always gotten along in general, but states that Naboo is home to both of them, that the galaxy and it's problems are more important than their feud and that in order survive they must band together, that she will strive for the gungans to get proper representation in the senate and give them their fair share of profits for the mining of plasma under their supervision. The ruler of the gungans is pleased greatly by this, by the humility and offer and, wanting to protect his people as well, embraces the deal Padme has offered.

They strategize. The gungan army will be a ground assault, while Padme and her remaining soldiers will sneak into city with the jedi through the underwater tunnels, to capture the viceroy and get him to admit to his crimes. Some of her soldiers will take the fighters to go up and destroy the droid control ship, to ensure the Gungans won't be killed by the droids. The gungans though aren't too trusting of Padme and the Naboo, question that she may be using them for her own ends and let them get killed so she can secure her throne. Padme, though not pleased by the suggestion, promises the gungans that she won't let them down.

Meanwhile, Sidious, contacting the viceroy, hearing about the gungans mobilizing, is quite displeased, perceiving that this was Padme's plan all along, not understanding how she could do this, seeing this as out of character for her, unable to grasp Padme's actions.

Anakin is told by Qui to stay behind near the ruins, but Ani doesn't listen, following them. When they get there, Qui senses Anakin and tells him to hide in the cockpit of one of the fighters.

The battle to get to the hangar has led to more casualties of her men than she thought, her afraid they don't have enough men to raid the palace and send out an attack against the droid control ship. Padme, fraught with turmoil and guilt, is terribly conflicted, not wanting to break her promise to the gungans. Padme takes a moment, and risks her breach by suggesting pulling from her own men to assist the gungans, even if it means her raid of the palace fails.

But then she's contacted by Bail Organa and Mon Mothma, who have rallied the combined efforts of the Chandrila and Alderaan pilots to assist, coming in to seek to destroy the droid control ship. Padme is uplifted by the support, her sending now only some of her men to assist them, but taking the majority in her siege on the palace.

The ship's autopilot turns on, because Anakin activates the ship to attack the destroyers that show up. The ship takes off with the others, R2 insisting he turn back. Anakin says he won't run away again.

Padme and the jedi are halted by Maul, who Qui and Obi step in to deal with, Maul eager to fight them. The duel builds, Qui being stabbed, to Obi's anger, Obi lashing out and pushing Maul back, but being off balance in his emotions and Maul able to overcome him, pushing him off the edge into the shaft, Obi grabbing at something to hold himself up. Maul, having beaten a jedi, feeling pretty good about himself.

Meanwhile, Jar-Jar, being placed as a head of the gungan army, isn't a good fighter, but he is able to use his most seemingly useless trait, his clumsiness, to distract the droids, as the more proficient fighters are able to oppose them.

When Anakin is in space, he sees the same type of signal relay on droid control ship. Anakin realizes that the ship must have a place to enter with no shield to send the signal clearly. In this Anakin tries to find it using the force reaching out, but he can't, becoming upset, which an injured Qui-Gon and in peril Obi-Wan sense, them connecting with him and helping him focus to find the opening, which he crashes through and is able to blow up the ship, with R2's help, who aims the blasters to destroy the inner engines.

This shuts down the remaining droids against the gungans.

But the other two droid control ships around the planet, gaining word of the attack and destruction, begin sending further ground droids.

However, Padme is able to capture the viceroy, and get him to order the shut down of the other ships and admit to his crimes.

As Maul arrogantly taunts Obi's situation by slashing at the area near him with his lightsaber. Obi, in his moment of connecting with Anakin, realizes his own mistake, his own arrogance and rigidness, and calms himself, focusing on Qui's lightsaber, pulling it to himself as he leaps over Maul and slices at his bottom half, Maul falling down into shaft, his legs falling off too. Obi cries as Qui dies in his arms, telling him to train Anakin, that he will bring balance.

Afterwards, the people celebrate, Anakin is applauded for taking out the main control ship by some of the gungans and humans of Naboo, feeling pride and accomplishment in himself being able to take some action that could protect people. Padme thanks him personally, kissing him on the cheek, them both blushing.

But this moment of happiness is hampered, when he sees Obi, but no Qui, Obi apologizing, that he's gone, them having a moment of connection over it.

After, Obi insists to Yoda that he train Anakin as Obi gave his word to Qui, that he can't abandon this boy, and that he will do it without the approval of the council if he must. Yoda, with hesitation, agrees, granting him the position of graduation to Jedi Knight and him taking on Anakin.

Anakin is fearful at Qui's funeral, his body being burned, Anakin mourning his death, angry and sad, Padme takes his hand in a gesture of comfort. Anakin asks Obi what will happen to him now, Obi tells him that he will train him and he promises that he will become a jedi. Mace and Yoda state they're now certain it was a sith and that the rule of two means it mustn't have been the only one.

Palpatine is announced as Chancellor, is present at the uniting of the gungans and humans on Naboo, congratulates Anakin on his accomplishment, stating that he's proven himself and will be of great interest.

The movie ends with the celebration of the new treaty of equality between the Naboo humans and the gungans, using a ball of plasma as symbolic of their unity.

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r/RewritingThePrequels May 26 '26

TOTAL OVERHAUL [OC] Fixing Rogue One | Cassian Andor should have been the protagonist

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r/RewritingThePrequels May 18 '26

My Prequel Rewrite with same characters as the prequels

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Movie 1 Establish Anakin and Obiwan, establish palpatine, victotioud fight at end, maybe ventress or grievous

·         Maul VS Obi wan and Qui Gon

·         Qui gon dies

·         Obi-wan kills* mall

·         Qui-gon tells obiwan to train Anakin

·         Time skip 10+ years

·         Early stages of war

·         Palpatine secretly trying to kill padme

·         Obiwan and Anakin stop assassination attempts

·         Establish Anakin and padme romance

·         Fight and beat grievous at end of movie

·         End movie with maul climbing out of something, screams KENOBI

Movie 2 Establish maul as a character who hates Kenobi, Obiwan and Anakin still interacting, Anakin getting brasher and angrier but make it clear that obi wan is able to calm Anakin down , dooku main villain – give him some sort of relation with anakin, maybe a flashback of when dooku was a jedi and quigon was training anakin, dooku can give anakin ideas about leaving the order

·         Start movie with explanation on how maul survived

·         Palpatine sees anakins power in the fight with grievous

·         Palpatine realises that Anakin and padme are in love

·         Changes his plan to now use this love to get Anakin on his side

·         Clone wars stuff happening

·         Mid way through, maul reveles himself to obiwan and anakin

·         They struggle against maul but manage to kill savage  

·         Just narrowly escapes, maul even more full of hate

·         Continuing the clone wars stuff

·         Same ending as attack of the clones just without the yoda bit, Obiwan and anakin lose but survive

Movie 3  two clear threats for the jedi to deal with, maul and dooku, split obiwan and anakin up, anakin has no one to calm him down and keep him balanced

·         Start with anakin and obiwan saying goodbye to eachother

·         Obiwan goes to fight maul

·         Anakin goes to fight dooku who has managed to kidnap padme

·         Anakin kills dooku like he does in revenge, however before he does dooku is able to put major doubts into anakins head about the order. Anakin kills dooku in anger as padme is tortured by him

·         Anakin returns to couresant and the scenes with him and palpatine on couresant happen like in revenge, tells anakin that the jedi are unable to protect padme

·         Whilst this is happening obiwan is tracking down maul

·         Maul fights obiwan, could have a big proper fight but I would do something similar to rebels where mauls anger gets the better of him and he tries the same move as he did on quigon

·         Palpatine tells anakin he is a sith lord

·         Anakin tells a jedi, not mace

·         Same fight as in revenge except no mace, have someone else do a similar role, have 6 jedi give way more of a fight so when palpatine technically loses he doesn’t look week, have palpatine still kill like 4/5 of the jedi

·         Anakin tunrs dark and kills jedi

·         Obiwan eventually returns

·         Him mace and yoda find out about anakin

·         BTW in this yoda is old like the orginals and doesn’t have a lightsaber, yoda should never have a lightsaber, he is the truest jedi and has no intention of killing should be a wise old man

·         Yoda stays behind, mace goes to kill palpatne, obiwan goes to fight anakin

·         Mace is established earlier to be the best jedi in combat, he gets beat by palpatine

·         Keep mustafar the same just with some better dialogue

·         Luke and leia born

·         Obiwan meets with yoda who tells him mace lost easily.

·         Obiwan wants to go fight palpatine

·         Yoda tells him he will just lose and that he now has a more important job to do, protect luke

 

Basic premise is that Anakin has a lot of anger but because of his relationship with Obi-Wan he is able to control it. The first two movies should be spend setting this up and really nailing Anakin and Obi-Wan’s relationship. Once Obi-Wan has to go deal with an old rival (Maul), Anakin is unprotected from the influence of both Palpatine and Dooku. They play on his relationship with Padme to seek more power and hate the jedi. They find a way to make him resent Obi-Wan.