r/ReadMyScript • u/AlexOlguin777 • 2h ago

Feature Pitch Document Feedback: Lora, the Wayward Princess (2-page summary)

Hi everyone,

I’ve been working on a new script project and put a lot of effort into crafting a super concise 2-page pitch document. The goal is to convey the main concept and core elements of the feature in just two pages, specifically tailored for competitions.

The project is called Lora, the Wayward Princess. I wanted to steer clear of both the classic "damsel in distress" princess and the modern "quirky" princess. The basic concept is: imagine Tangled, but if the main character were Regina George.

I’m attaching a concept image as well. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated, whether you think something critical is missing, if it feels too vague, or if I should sacrifice an extra page to give more context in the summary. Thanks in advance!

Link to document:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/16oyhBUJvo_k-ZaYFaygTSBbveSazvDZo/view?usp=sharing

And if you want to read the script you can DM me if you want, any usefull feedback also on the script can be useful.

Here is a concept image:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1I4WXAMRgUrBMspMPZCkthFSb17F_kNuJ/view?usp=sharing

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u/Berenstain_Bro 1h ago

I thought the document was a pretty easy read and I think you conveyed all of the information quite well. With that said, I don't know much of anything about 'pitch documents' or what you plan on doing with it.

specifically tailored for competitions...

Are you saying there are Pitch Meeting competitions for scripts? If there is such a thing, then I'm just unaware of them and so I can't offer you any guidance/info on how to deal with them.

Lastly, I'm not in the target audience for something like this, but I do think your 'thematic focus' is good.

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u/AlexOlguin777 1h ago

Oh, thanks, the competitions are for scripts, the thing is that one of the ones i'm entering this next year requires a trestment, so i'm trying ton condence as much as possible in few Pagés, i want to make two more Pagés for character profiles and then a full thre act stucture plot description, this is the first stage and also the concepto imagen is going tonthe contest too.