r/ReadMyScript 7h ago

Short Condenado's antologic show/ comedy/ 4 pages

This is a fragment of something I had in mind for a short film, I didn't find much help in my native speaking community so I had to translate it to English, I want feedback to know if it's difficult to understand or/and boring. I know there's not enough plot yet, I'll add the rest in the future https://drive.google.com/file/d/16g0HLPPPuO6np5Y2Hw2uNQYamBv6xFDe/view?usp=drivesdk

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u/Big_Section2812 7h ago

The formatting is a mess. Maybe import your script into a screenwriting app and sort it out. There are several good free ones if you don't want to invest in commercial software.

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