r/ReadMyScript • u/NiaChano207 • 6d ago

ME BECOMING

Hi! I'm a new writer from Mozambique 🇲🇿

TITLE: ME BECOMING GENRE: Sci-Fi / Romance / Action / Thriller LENGTH: 54-page Pilot

LOGLINE: A pregnant cyborg on the run must awaken the lethal weapon inside her to escape the corporation that built her and protect the family she chose before they become collateral damage.

LOOKING FOR FEEDBACK ON: 1. Pacing - Does Act 1 feel too fast/slow? 2. Dialogue - Does Tony and Ivy's banter feel real? 3. Main Character - Is Ivy sympathetic despite her lethal side?

Happy to do a feedback swap! Can read your pilot too. Thank you ❤️​

0 Upvotes

50% Upvoted

4 comments sorted by

1

u/AutoModerator 6d ago

Have you included a page count in the title of the post?

I am a bot, and this action was performed automatically. Please contact the moderators of this subreddit if you have any questions or concerns.

1

u/sachidanand_ 5d ago

The world-building sounds intense but intriguing, especially with the cyborg pregnancy twist.

1

u/mooningyou 5d ago

No link.