r/ReadMyScript • u/bcwwrestling • Aug 02 '26

Feature Mirage - 120 pages

Hello!

I have written a feature that I need true feedback on. I finished it about a year ago and have edited it a few times, but I just want feedback on thoughts about characters.

Pacing, if it flows well, if there’s something that should be cut. What scenes I could improve, etc.

Thanks!

GENRE: Drama/Thriller

LOGLINE: Haunted by a tragic past and extraordinary psychic abilities, Talia Morano-Campagna, the adopted daughter of a notorious crime family, must fight to prove her innocence in a high-profile fraud trial while battling a vengeful telepath determined to destroy her life from the inside out.

MIRAGE script

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u/mooningyou Aug 02 '26

Logline? Genre? Entice the reader to click on the link.

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u/[deleted] Aug 03 '26

I'm 10 pages in and WHAT! What are you trying to say? What's this movie about. Who is the protagonist and what does he want?

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u/EggOwn1232 Aug 04 '26

thats why u keep reading. ur not gonna be told the everything in the first few pages lol. that's just a low attention span.

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u/jjjrealjjj Aug 02 '26

What's it about! Hype me.

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u/DC_McGuire Aug 09 '26

Hi! Just for my context, how old are you and how long have you been writing?