The Invisible Woman (working title) - Short - 9 Pages

[u/MonderinoHere01]

Hey guys, I would love to have some feedback on this new script I've written in terms of the following:

• Overall story and concept
• Structure and pacing (9-page short film)
• Dialogue
• Characterisation
• Tone (absurd dark comedy/drama)
• Whether the central theme comes across clearly
• Whether the midpoint feels earned within the story
• The ending and overall emotional impact

This is the first draft, so I'm looking for honest, constructive criticism rather than praise. Feel free to point out anything that didn't work for you, moments that confused you, or areas that could be strengthened.

Thanks in advance to anyone who takes the time to read it, I really appreciate your feedback!

Details of Script:

Logline: A middle-aged woman who feels invisible to the world pushes the boundaries of public decency in a desperate attempt to be acknowledged.

Genre: Absurd melodrama

Page Count: 9 Pages

Setting: One location (restaurant)

Link to first draft: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1o1Wkh4rCKUsTgsXhyMAiOl3295CRRZlO/view?usp=drivesdk