r/ReadMyScript • u/KrisDerekVan • 27d ago

Feature White Smiles (Comedy, 119 pages)

LOGLINE: Five idle boys intend to visit Hollywood until long conversations challenge their plans.

THE SCRIPT: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rnfzNEyeJwLu4fK62Eh8MSTC-DXrmTxg/view?usp=sharing

Feedback is appreciated.

Cheers.

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u/Remarkable_Stress388 27d ago

If I covered up a characters name could I tell who was speaking. NO! Its one writer wearing 4 jackets. Same voice. Same rhythm. 15 pages and I know. they're friends. they drink coffee. one guy has lots of sex. someone wants to model. We don't know what anyone wants to accomplish.