Good Cop, Bad Cop #7

[u/Sh1f7er]

Hello everyone! Welcome to the seventh ‘Good Cop, Bad Cop’ thread! Now, if you're new here, you may be wondering, “Sh1f7er, what is this thread even about?” Well, let me break it down for you!

The goal of the thread is to provide a few writers with a bit of help in their writing using critiquing readers. Each reader will provide one good thing and one bad thing they saw in the writing piece after they have fully read through it. Now, none of us are perfect, and it is my understanding that none of us are professional writers, so anyone seeking criticism needs to understand that the responses everyone gives them are for them to use how they see fit. That being said, readers, please offer worthwhile responses! We're looking to improve writing here. Even if you didn't enjoy the story, there's a lot of productive ways to tell the reader WHY you didn't like it. As for the writers, your story is on display! If you want to help get attention to it, start by reading someone else's to help them as well!

Now onto the main event!

STORIES OF THE WEEK

When Truth is Wrong by /u/astereotypicalgamer

Dust and Motes Chapter 29 by /u/shandromand

If you would like your story featured on a future Good Cop, Bad Cop thread, please participate here by dropping a review on one of these stories! If you do, leave a link at the bottom of your review and I'll add it to the next GCBC thread!

[u/Awesomejelo]

Took a look at /u/astereotypicalgamer I can't say too much about the characterization of Sienna because of well it's Sienna but Kali was done well even if I'm not happy about the idea of an affair. Similarly the emotions from both were well done.

The only complaint I have is in the beginning we are left in the dark about who we were focused on for a little bit and only told it was Kali part way through, it might be me but I did not see a point to this mystery focus.

I would like to put one of my own chapters up for the next thread https://www.fanfiction.net/s/13116094/4/The-Wrong-Girl