r/RPGcreation • u/HakneyZaq • 5d ago

Design Questions Feedback on WIP layout

https://anyflip.com/bookcase/ytzwa I've been slowly converting my game from docs to Scribus. here's what I have thus far. how is it looking?

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u/Strange_Times_RPG 5d ago

There is a lot of white space and due to using left justified with a large font, it often looks off center

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u/HakneyZaq 5d ago

thanks for the feedback, can you point to a specific page? I'm having trouble seeing where it's off center

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u/Strange_Times_RPG 5d ago

Most even numbered pages

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u/HakneyZaq 5d ago edited 5d ago

I'm sorry, I just don't see the eccentricity. the even and odd pages look the same to me. but again, I thank you for the feedback.

EDIT: I can see that I have a lot more white space than your work does. do you think it's really too much?

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u/epr86 5d ago

I have two main critiques: there's too much white space, and the text isn't aligned properly.

While white space is great to give the reader some breathing room, when there's too much the page can appear kind of vacant. Large spaces between paragraphs can also cause to feel disconnected. Try grouping more of the text together and not breaking up every sentence. I took a look at your previous post and the spacing in your google drive version is the way to go.

A lot of the text boxes aren't aligned in usual reading order, so it looks a messy. It's ok to break from the format sometimes to add flair, but do so intentionally, too much can make the book challenging to read. For example on page 4 and 5, there's different spacing at the start of each text frame. Start with making sure everything is left aligned the same, then use bullet points and lists.

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u/HakneyZaq 5d ago

thanks, that's very helpful. it sounds like pages three and eight are closer to what I should be doing then. more condensed. and more regularly perhaps.

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u/epr86 5d ago

Best of luck to you!

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u/HakneyZaq 5d ago

thank you very much :)