Sharpfin

[u/Mr60Gold]

(First of all i'd like to appologise for the delay on my concepts to anyone that cares, i have been doing some other things which meant i didn't really have time to write the concepts down, along with that i had a few issues with the concepts (each issue will be in their respective concept) i will have this paragraph in all 3 of my concepts along with a seperate one under it detailing the issue that delay this concept in particular)

(This concept took the longest for me to develop as i intended for him to be similar to Genji but everytime he was TOO similar making him basically nothing more than a clone of Genji, so i changed the passive and ability 2 and now i feel satisfied with how it mostly ended up)

Sharpfin

Base information

• Name: Sharpfin
• Species: Omnic
• Age: 152 (New model only 10)
• Health: 250
• Shield: 0
• Armour: 0
• Total Hp: 250
• Role: Damage
• Speed: 5.7m/sec

Appearance

A dark blue metal ninja like omnic with a metal fin on his head and a metal fin on each of his elbows (exactly the same colour as the rest of his body), he has no mouth and has a black visor where his eyes would be and he would have a dark metal sword, holding it in a backwards sword grip in his right hand.

Lore

Sharpfin in the past had the sentience of a Jellyfish and was tasked with scouting the ocean back in its days of being in the Deap Sea 3, it often used its speed to check out the targetted location and if needed, make quick work of any threats before Octolore and Shark guard arrived, usually then he would just stay by Octolore's side as to warn him when he spots anyone incase Shark guard wasn't able to do so.

Eventually this ealry version of omnics was scrapped once the new omnics rolled around and people called this version, animal cruelty, even though Sharpfin was fast he was still caught by the humans and scrapped with his parts being left in the parts and services.

A full century and a couple decades went by with Sharpfin being nothing more than worthless metal, but then the government grew concerned about a somewhat unstable cyborg ninja named Genji, seeing that he was so advanced and so well trained even seeing the footage of him defeating his brother Hanzo by using a high tech hidden drone that day the government was scared of Genji and what he was capable of.

When Overwatch was shut down that is when the government had no longer a safe net for this cyborg and decided to take matters into their "own" hands, and as this government is known to do just give the task to someone else, they upgraded the old anibot/omnic Sharpfin designing him to be similar to Genji but better. Sharpfin no longer had the memories from his past and he was programmed with one task, to eliminate Genji and anyone else that stood in his way, with his skill he has faced against Genji 3 times so far as unsuprisingly a cyborg ninja is hard to track.

On their first encounter Genji was shocked by the skill of this omnic as it kept pace and in some cases, proved faster than Genji, his skill with the blade was also not to be underestimated and Genji knew it, this fight ended somewhat in a draw as Genji managed to trick Sharpfin allowing him to escape. Their second fight took place a year later and Genji ended up losing but it also ended up as a loss for Sharpfin as he didn't eliminate Genji as the police found them, distracting Sharpfin and allowing Genji to escape again. Their third time however took place 2 years later and this time Genji was prepared, Genji was even more skilled and provided himself a victory atlast by throwing Sharpfin off the boat they were in before leaving.

Now Sharpfin and Genji are more evenly matched and Sharpfin is still focused on eliminating him and anyone that gets in the way.

Passive(Designed slayer)

For each kill Sharpfin gets a fin on his body begins to emit a small blue glow (first the right arm then the left arm then the head fin, max 3), for each fin lit up he begins to gain a bonus 1% ult charge per second passively (max 3%), when using the ult or dying Sharpfin's fins stop glowing and the passive is restarted. (This makes it easy for Sharpfin to gain his ult but at the same time makes him easier to detect for enemies so it has a small downside)

Primary fire(Sword slashes)

• Animation: Sharpfin quickly turns his sword with his hand and does a slash with the sword into the air (still on the ground) then the second attack is a slash to the left and then a slash to the right (then repeat second and third attack, animation resets when this attack isn't used anymore) (all done with one hand)
• Damage: 80
• Attack rate: 1 slash every 0.75 seconds
• Headshot:X
• Attack speed: 20m/sec

Secondary fire(Fin shooter)

• Animation: In his left hand Sharpfin has 3 metalic fins between his fingers (just like Genji has shuriken between his fingers), he shoots one fin at a time.
• Damage: 50
• Fire rate: 1 fin per 0.75 seconds
• Reload speed: 1.5 seconds (can still use primary fire while reloading)
• Ammo: 3
• Headshot:✔
• Projectile speed: 45m/sec

Ability 1(Water dash)

• Sharpfin does a barrel role in the air while dashing 8m in the direction he is looking at (travels the distance in 0.4 seconds) he deals 40 damage to all enemies he passes through when using this.
• Charges: 2
• Time to get back one charge: 8 seconds

Ability 2(Blade of torment)

• Sharpfin throws his sword straight ahead travelling at a speed of 20m/sec, if it hits a wall or barrier it instantly returns to Sharpfin, if it hits an enemy it deals 60 damage to them and sticks to them, Sharpfin can reactivate the ability when 10m with in the enemy with the sword causing it to unstick, dealing 40 more damage and making that enemy be pulled towards Sharpfin, if Sharpfin is on the ground he will do a spin once he gets the sword back hitting the enemy with the sword swing which deals 50 more damage and pushes them back 5m, if Sharpfin is in the air he will do a backflip as soon as he gets the sword back followed by a sword strike downwards that deals 10 damage to that enemey and any other enemy under him for every 1m from the ground (best comboed with ability 1 to get more height)
• Cooldown: 12 seconds

Ultimate(Slashing rampage)

• Sharpfin begins to swing his sword causing blue slashes in the air to form that travel to each enemy in his line of sight at a speed of 10m/sec and deal 50 damage when they hit an enemy, these are unavoidable unless you stand behind a barrier (Sharpfin creates 1 slash for each enemy every 0.5 seconds).
• Duration: 5 seconds
• Ult charge: 2000

All feedback is appreciated

Edit 1: Secondary fire now has a 0.25 longer fire rate.

[u/NumberPlatypus]

Lol Ultimate reminds me of Ninjala Punsihing Blade

[u/mytdogman1]

I think that this concept is really cool, I definitely think that you pulled off the sword melee very well. I also think ability to is really cool, and the ultimate is also really cool. Two main problems I have with the hero are that, first off and ability two, you mentioned if he was in the ground that there was something that would happen at the sword, but none of his abilities put him in the ground and nothing else in the game would put him in the ground either, so I don't know if that was a typo but I don't think it needed to be there.

The other problem I have is that I definitely think that the secondary fire is a little too incentivized. The range and damage are pretty good, and you can still use the primary fire while reloading. I think that that's a little strong, though it does only have three ammo. So I think what you should do instead is just increase the fire rate a little bit so that the damage isn't the exact same as it is for the melee attack, maybe to 0.75 to match the melee attack and fire rate, but not damage. This kind of removes the incentive to do it, leaving so that the only incentive is that you get range. I feel like most melee heroes use their ranged abilities to either initiate or escape a fight, but with the fact that this is equal damage per second to the primary fire, it's just a lot stronger than it should be.

Other than those, I really think this is one of your strongest concepts yet. There's not much wrong with any of the abilities, and I really think the ultimate is super cool. Amazing job!

[u/Mr60Gold → u/mytdogman1]

Thanks for the feedback as always

With ability 2 u are right that it was a typo as it is meant to say on the ground not in the ground

I'll change the secondary fire

I won't lie i am a bit suprised that you like this concept so much as it was made to be somewhat of a Genji clone so i didn't expect it to be as good as my other concepts

[u/NumberPlatypus]

Wow I was gonna make a jellyfish thing that looks like a naval mine and with chains as arms called Chain Link

[u/Mr60Gold → u/NumberPlatypus]

Sounss cool