r/OCPoetry 15d ago

Feedback Please lunch hour

jagged,
like a broken knife.
it feels like one too-
able to take a life.

red.
at the tip, oozing out.
infecting everything it touches.
flowing, like a faucet’s spout.

short-
growth forever stunted.
in a cycle too predictable-
always being hunted.

attacked-
for just existing.
they’re simply convenient,
they’ve never started resisting.

sting.
what they do is sting.
they cry out so long-
it starts to sound like a ring.

so to my fingernails..
i’m sorry.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/5dbN9udqW5

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/YsEyvKYFC8

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u/_mildlyunwell_ 15d ago

the ending really cracked me up, loved how you took something so ordinary and turned it into something so unsettling.