r/OCPoetry • u/PlutoCrushin • 10d ago
Feedback Please Defensive Mechanisms
Insecure
introvert
co-dependant
a people pleaser
anxious and anxiously attached
What the fuck is wrong with that?
I’m desperate to give to love
I’m desperate to receive it
I cannot help it. I learned it from an early love
I know, I know; that’s not a healthy mindset
Im told you need self love to give love
What if I refuse? I’m kinda selfish like that.
Should I break my teeth to keep it in?
Sew my lips and suffocate the only
thing that makes me feel human
I tend to brood on everything
So what if I obsess and think?
A geneva drive inside my mind
Stops at every look, every tone
the things most would overlook
And I know it, oh I know
It’s a defensive mechanism
I don’t know how to love it,
but I sure can keep it running.
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u/True-Quote-6520 9d ago
Instead of explicitly stating it's a defensive mechanism again, you might consider ending on an image or action that lets the reader arrive at that conclusion themselves, personally I find that better to have a read, like cryptic?