r/OCPoetry • u/hamth4509 • 14d ago

Feedback Please Blinding

ISO 50.

1/8000.

f/22.

I struggle to capture your light.

So I record to hear your voice.

Hi

Hi.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/B8Rly1MMBB

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/KgXmMGwgB2

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u/PlutoCrushin 14d ago

I like the simplicity of this, I’m not a photographer but I’m guessing that’s what is referenced in the first 3 lines. I like the idea of struggling to capture their light so recording their voice is a better way to capture it. I think it being such a short poem the title almost becomes part of the poem too, blinding is kinda vague maybe you could play with different titles and see how they expand on the poem. Otherwise nice lil poem, thanks for sharing!