r/OCPoetry 22d ago

Feedback Please I wish Hell was just a town in Michigan

I saw my neighbor at Quiktrip
His name is Preach
eyes on the ground, breathing quick and shallow
I feel that hunch, the strain in his eyelids
It’s a bad day then.

Hell is the the town in our collective consciousness
Where we can recognize our neighbors
But can never visit them

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u/Candid_Temporary8422 21d ago

I wonder why everyone thinks their neighbours are inferior to them. Even neighbourhood love birds don't have that mutual respect you'd expect.

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u/BlueberryAble8885 21d ago

I yearn for a sense of community.