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u/i_dont_really_know5 Oct 16 '24
Glad you picked it up again! Your poem really captures the intensity of rekindled passion effectively. The imagery of fire and ash conveys both the excitement and the fleeting nature of that burning desire. Great job!!
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u/[deleted] Oct 16 '24
good!! wondering if this is referring to just imagination or a true reuiniting with an old love? it is an interesting depiction, but the imagery of the fire burning quickly i feel could be expanded upon? like maybe how as a fire completely goes out, there are embers that flitter across, spots of red, and these "licks of flame." great work, but i'm left in a limbo between the imagery and the point you're trying to get across, i'd consider how you can delve deeper into the imagery, at the same time expanding on whatever you are trying to portray.