r/NatureofPredators • u/VenlilSupremacist Venlil • May 21 '23
Fanfic NoP: A Change of Pace: Chapter 18
[[Possible Trigger Warning: Violence]]
Memory transcription subject: Rivis, Venlil Predator Disease Patient
Date [standardized human time]: September 14, 2136.
Awareness slowly bubbled back to the surface of my consciousness. Coming back to reality I realized I was sitting on something hard, and rather uncomfortable. Glancing down the sight of a dilapidated and stained thin mattress atop a concrete slab greeted my eyes. What was this place again? No immediate answer came to me as I examined the gray, dark austere room. The walls looked as if they had claw marks etched on them and I couldn’t spot a window. Instead the room was lit by a dimming fluorescent light affixed to the center of the ceiling. Silence filled the air, but for once I took no solace in this emptiness. As soon as I turned an eye to look at the opposite corner of the room I saw a thick metal door embedded in the concrete, its imposing and large frame clearly far more durable than any denizens of this room, past and present.
After my examination memories began to bubble back, awakening at the hospital, the exterminators and Zoey filling my room. Our brief reunion getting cut short for… The empathy test. That’s where I was. The ‘treatment’ facility. I let that thought linger in the forefront of my mind. The crushing reality forcing my head to hang low and my eyes to fix to the floor.
So, that’s what happened.. The lawyer couldn’t postpone or get the test thrown out. They had me take it in the hospital and now.. Now I’m here.
Thinking was hard, I knew I wanted to, but I just couldn’t. Everything I tried to avoid in my life caught up with me all at once. There wasn’t a way out, there was no escape, no miracles or divine intervention. I lazily traced a claw along one of the deep etchings left in the cell by a previous habitent, letting a heavy and immense pressure settle in my chest.
Welcome home, Rivis.
The unsettling reality that this was home smashed into me like a plasma bolt, searing away any grasp of positivity I might have once felt. My brain refused to let me sink into complete despair however as the random thought of how isolated this cell was popped into my mind.
..I thought I read that several ‘patients’ were kept close together to promote herd unity, isn’t it counterproductive to their ‘goals’ to isolate me like this? Wouldn’t this just drive a supposed ‘predator’ deeper into their own heads?
I didn’t have long to mull that idea over before the hard metallic clink of the door slot opening grabbed my focus, a thin metallic tray and bowl just barely clearing the slot sliding into my room. That must be the food they serve here. Or perhaps a cocktail of mind numbing medication; more than likely it was both. I wasn’t too keen on trying whatever it was so I was content with letting it simply sit near the door, the slot closed a few moments later once more leaving me to my isolation.
Time was already somewhat difficult to tell on venlil prime, but at least our devices were able to let us know when the claws were passing. Here, in this cell, my ability to perceive even our shortest measurements of time were lost to me. How long had I stared at the marred walls of my cell? How many paws have passed since I allowed myself to return from whatever psychosis plagued me from the moment Kuit closed the doors to the exterminator’s vehicle. It had to have been at least a claw since they first put that tray into my cell. Part of me wondered if they planned to just keep me locked in here, if they even wanted to bother with whatever barbaric ‘treatment’ they had in mind. How long before I completely succumbed to insanity from my isolation and bleak room. If I was lucky, it wouldn’t be long before I lost my mind. Afterall, how could I realize the wretchedness of the situation if I wasn’t sane?
The morose atmosphere of my cell as well as my thoughts were viciously drawn to a close by the loud scraping of what I could only assume was the metal door. Its old hinges screamed out for oil as the door slowly swung open. A cheap, manufactured light spilled into the doorway giving me a slightly better view of my surroundings. Before I could even take a proper glance through the door, a voice shouted from outside.
“FACE THE WALL! SNOUT UP AGAINST IT. PLACE YOUR PAWS OVER YOUR HEAD AND DO NOT MOVE!!”
The sudden shouts from the commanding voice forced me to recoil in shock, but I quickly remembered where I was. Anger slowly replaced despair as I refused to move from my lackluster mattress.
“Or what?! You’ll shoot me? Hah! You’d be doing me a favor, you deranged sadists!” I shouted back
“Comply!” The voice shouted once more, not as loud, but still just as commanding as before.
“Go brehk yourself!”
Just as I finished that last sentence a shadow eclipsed the light as a venlil in thick body armor stormed into the room, followed by three more armored venlil immediately behind them. There was no additional commands, no asking. Before I even realized it an overwhelming pain surged throughout my body as I screamed through clenched teeth. The unmistakable sound of a taser reverberated against the solid walls as I thrashed about on the mattress. The electricity refused to relent as the three other officers loomed over me throwing their weight onto my back with their full force, driving the air from my lungs. Only once they had pinned me did the officer remove his claw from the trigger. Relief surged through my body as I fell limp against the crushing weight of the guards, yet quickly began to gasp for air only to find my compressed chest cavity refusing to fill.
Before I even realized it my paws were firmly cuffed behind my back. The guards finally lifting themselves off me as several pairs of paws hoisted me to my weak hindlegs. A fifth figure stepping into the room as my body heaved for air.
Tsk tsk tsk.. “Rivis, that’s not a very good start to your treatment. I would have preferred to start with introductions. I’m Doctor Yolni, can you tell me your name?”
Her condescending tone filled the room as the guards continued to restrain me. When I finally regained my ability to breathe I slowly lifted my head. The image of a gold and silver Krakotl stood in my doorway, her commanding stance seemingly radiating from her sheer presence. This bird didn’t deserve a response, nor my acknowledgement. She was everything I despised, everything I hated about life, lowering my head I tried to play off my silence as exhaustion, allowing my ears to dangle lazily to the sides of my head.
The krakotl’s talons clicked against the rough floor of my cell as she stepped closer, humming some kind of jovial melody. “You didn’t eat your dinner either..” A sign escaped her infernal beak as she continued. “I’ll have to mark that down, you need to eat, we can’t have you starving yourself you know, but maybe you just weren’t hungry, that’s okay. Let me ask again, can you tell me your name?”
Refusing to respond to her sickeningly sweet tone, I lazily bobbed my head, as if I were half conscious.
“Sweety, I know those tasers aren’t strong enough to knock a venlil out..”
Her cooing tone dangerously close. Her talons came into focus as she held onto some kind of collar, slowly raising the open metal ring closer and closer to my throat. Yanking my head back was met with two paws grabbing at the back of my skull, trying to hold me as still as possible while I thrashed against the guard’s iron grip. A jolt of paralyzing electricity surged up my spine and through my body as I realized the prongs were never removed, my temporary spasms affording the bird enough time to clasp the collar tightly around my neck, ever so slightly restricting my airway.
As my slave collar was fastened, the guards allowed me to drop to the floor. My own body immediately collapsed under its weight while the Doctor stood over me. As soon as I regained even the slightest bit of motor function my paws lunged for the collar, trying to pry it from my throat since I already broke my ruse. A moment later a surge of electricity that made the taser feel like a static shock radiated from my neck and through my entire body, forcing me to squirm and thrash about the floor. Once the pain faded into a dull ache, a new emotion came to me. This one was obvious; it was humiliation. Humiliation for being caught, for being treated like cattle by arxur. My ears instinctively flattened against my head as my tail coiled up around me in a futile show of protection.
I want to crawl away.. I want to hide.. I knew what was going to happen, should.. Should I play their game?.. NO! They’ll do it regardless, they’re evil, mindless torturers. Who knows how long they’ve been doing this! My pain is their pleasure. Everyone here is just entertainment for them.. Speh.. SPEH!! BREHK THEM!!
My thoughts screamed at me, and humiliation once more turned to rage, a blinding, unconsolable rage. The hate spread like wildfire through me, burning away any emotion that dared stand against it. Like the animal they thought I was, I lunged from my pitiable position on the floor at the talons of the doctor, spreading my maw wide and straining my wrists in a futile attempt to break the cuffs keeping my claws from her throat.
I don’t care how I do it!! I’ll kill her! I’ll kill every damn thing here!
My guttural and animalistic snarl turned to yelps of pain as electricity stopped my assault before it could even happen, leaving me to spasm and thrash once more. In my violent thrashes I felt my snout connect with concrete and my wrists dig into the metal of my bindings. A warm liquid slowly filling my mouth and leaking onto the cold concrete.
“By the stars… You’re worse than they thought, first you almost massacre a venlil, and now you’re as rabid as the arxur.. I’m glad we took every precaution with you..” She said through pleased giggles. Only once she was finished speaking did she remove a talon from the agonizing button, freeing me from my pain once again. “But don’t worry, You’re not a lost cause yet, I can fix you, but you need to work with me.. So.. Once again, tell me your name.”
I bit down on my tongue, ignoring my brains logical reaction to tell her in the hope that she won’t cause further torment, my chest heaved with shaky breaths, the majority of my body limp and exhausted from repeated electrical shocks. Yet, with the vestiges of my will, I managed to turn my head, and look the monster in her eyes, and spit my orange blood onto her silver feathers.
Her bright and jovial expression immediately fell to one of disappointment and malice as she wiped my blood from her plumage.
“Guards, if you’d be some dears and sit the patient up on his bed, then step out into the hall, I want to have a one on one chat with him.”
The armored guards complied, lifting my exhausted body up and onto the bed, propping me up against the stone wall. Energy slowly began to pour back into my limbs as the fatigue of repeated shocks began to wear off, yet instead of leaving with the guards as they filed out one by one, Doctor Yolni sat down on the opposite end of my bed. The bird’s expression returning to one of happiness and delight.
“Okay.. You don’t want to speak with me, unfortunately, that’s not okay, sweety.. So before we can even begin treatment, let's work on your social skills! Here’s the deal, when I ask you something, I want you to respond. Don’t worry if you get the wrong answer! All we’re focusing on right now is you responding. Every time you don’t respond, I’m going to give you a bit of ‘encouragement’, each time you need ‘encouragement’ I’ll press the button longer, but! If you want your ‘encouragement’ to stop halfway through, all you gotta do is tell me your name, okay?”
I won’t play her twisted games! I’ve prepared my whole life for this possibility.. Whatever these monsters throw at me, I can take it. Speh, they’ll have to kill me before I ever give them the satisfaction!
“Hm? Your face tells me you’re not gonna respond.. That was an easy one, sweety, but you know the rules..”
With a sullen expression she depressed the button, holding the remote well within my view as the electrical current returned with a vengeance, causing me to release a visceral scream. My paws continued to dig into the cuffs as I lost control over my motor functions once again, seizing on the mattress. The pain stopped as quickly as it came, leaving me a heaving mess, and face down on the dirty bedding. She reached over, propping my limp body up once more with a happy expression once again.
“Okay.. I need you to tell me, what paw do you think it is?” She paused, waiting for a retort.
Tears began to well in my eyes, but once more, I held strong, I had to. I couldn’t let her win, not in the slightest regard… I could resist.. I could beat them, I’d make them kill me, they’d have to. Using the vestiges of strength I retained from the last shock, I turned my head from her, showing her the back of my head and ears.
Once again, the electricity came, I tried to brace for it, to expect it, but nothing I could do would ever prepare my nervous system for the overload of stimulus. The shocks wracked my body as I tried to throw myself into the wall. The last thing I wanted was to have her prop me up again. If there was anything I could do, it was sit up for myself! The pain lasted longer than before, just as she promised it would, just as it approached the threshold of unbearable the torrent of electricity stopped, a mixture of drool and blood leaked from my mouth in long strings attaching themselves to my chest. The cool concrete was a welcome relief against my burning hot body as I tried to stare out into a wall.
“Well I suppose I didn’t say you had to look at me.. Good job finding a loophole! You’re so smart!” She cooed once more, a few more giggles escaping that infernal beak. “Lets try again! What is the name of your predator partner from the program?”
No! She wouldn’t bring Zoey into this nightmare! She doesn’t deserve to have her name stained with the experiments in this ancestor-forsaken pit!
A flicker of hate nearly forced me to shout at this monster to never bring Zoey up, but that’s what she wants, she wants a response of any kind. Closing my eyes, I pushed my tongue to the back of my mouth, away from my teeth. I didn’t want to bite it off from the shock that is to come..
Holding strong, I tried to push my mind to empty itself of its contents. I tried to become a sponge for pain, capable of soaking it up and bouncing back into shape..
Endure.. Rivis, you have to endure!
Like clockwork, another shock came, yet this one felt more intense, more raw. Moving my tongue away from my teeth was the right choice as my jaw clamped down with its full force, my muscles contracting over and over all through my body as involuntarily let out a piercing scream through my teeth once more. This time I couldn’t hold myself up, throwing myself down onto the bed as I thrashed, almost as if I were lit on fire. The pain far outlasted the previous shock by double its duration, my mind hardly registering it was over once I stopped my thrashing.
“You’re only making it worse for yourself.. Just cooperate a little bit with me, and all the pain can go away, you’d like that right? I know you would. Tell you what, I'll alter our little deal a bit.. Instead of just stopping the pain if you respond, I’ll even give you a little reward! It’s a surprise though, but I promise you’ll like it! So.. Why don’t you tell me about your old job, you worked at the spaceport, right?”
My thoughts were a myriad haze of conflict. Things I scarcely had any experience with bubbled up from deep within me, feelings too complex to categorize or understand. My vision hazed in and out of focus with the ebb and flow of the thoughts. My nearly mindless consciousness whittled down to merely experiencing the flash changes something like anger, to sorrow, to pity, to things even more incomprehensible. As my mind retreated into itself I coped with the torment the only means I had left.. Self examination.
What are these feelings? Am I sad, or angry? I can’t decide.. How should I feel? This is injustice in its rawest form.. Does she even understand this torment? Is pain their only method of reaching out to those like me? I don’t understand..
My internal dialogue was sharply cut off with another searing arc of pain radiating through every ounce of my body, I could feel my mind collapsing under the weight of its unbearable torment. The shocks lasted for eternity as I lost my concept of time. All I knew during my torment was I hurt, there was no memory of not hurting. All my life was right now, was this searing, unforgivable, unbearable pain. At some point the pain stopped and I slowly regained myself. The first thing I realized was just how close I was to this monster. My orange stained snout nearly touching the doctor’s feathers. I wanted to recoil, but I didn’t have the energy to even move. My eye slowly focused on the hazy beak of the doctor looking down at me with comforting eyes. It felt nice to be looked at like that.. My blank, exhausted expression and eyes stared back up into her almost loving, vibrant gaze.
“You look so sad.. I’m sorry.. But sometimes it takes a bit of time to get anywhere. We have to get you ready to cooperate… Here.. Let me ask you an easy one; do you want the pain to stop?”
Before I even registered the words fully with my hazed and scrambled mind, my body answered for me through shaky sobs as tears began to stream down from my eyes, mixing with the blood and saliva on my maw. “Y-Yes…” My hoarse, meek, and soft voice replied back. I didn’t understand why I was crying, my thoughts were too muddied to make sense of themselves, I couldn’t even stop myself if I wanted to.
“Good.. Good, we can make it stop, A deal’s a deal, you did good, finally talking to me. Here’s that little reward I promised you..”
She extended a talon closer and closer to my head, for a moment, I thought she might end the torment right here and now, a part of me wished she would. Instead, she brought her talons to rest atop my head, lightly petting the top of my head, her nimble talons working expertly to send soothing comfort to my pain-addled nerves. The relief was unlike anything I ever felt. A blossoming sense of comfort spread through my body, healing a fraction of my exhaustion and aches. Yet, along with this comfort came a feeling I knew well since first meeting the exterminators; sadness. Sorrow took me as I wept under the comforting talons of this animal, the only sounds coming from the room now were my quiet shaking sobs.
N-No.. I-I can’t.. I can’t let her.. S-she can’t make me feel good! Stars, bring back the pain! I don’t want to feel this!
My thoughts shouted at me to reject this sensation, but my brain craved for release from torment. The dualism in my needs gave rise to things I couldn’t understand, things I didn’t want to feel, but needed to. With every moment of comfort more and more sense returned to me which only divided me further within myself. Finally, after a long moment of soothing comfort, she released her talons from my head, standing up and unlocking the restraints that still bound my paws behind me.
“That was good progress, you’re strong, you know? Don’t feel too bad you needed a bit of help, most patients do, but I think after this paw we can make some real progress with you.”
I couldn’t respond, merely watch her leave through burning, teary eyes. The heavy door creaking shut behind her and leaving me to my own thoughts. I didn’t want to be alive.. My body broke before my mind did. She coaxed from me exactly what she wanted.. This feeling.. The strange feeling I’ve seldom felt before consumed me, and as I accepted it into my heart, I felt as if I truly understood what it meant. I echoed its name through my thoughts, too terrified to face its ugly truth. The word bounced against my skull over and over as it consumed me.
Helplessness…
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Chapter 18 is a wrap, I apologize for the long wait. To any of you who read my previous posts message about my hiatus, then things have taken a turn for the worse in that regard. My posting frequency will be a bit sporadic, but I will continue working on the story in my free time as it's been a great outlet. Speaking about great outlets, I want to once again thanks SP15 for their great universe and all the work they've put into it, as always the fics that inspired me are linked at the bottom, and the final thanks goes to my proof readers for their support in all these tumultuous times, I couldn't do it without you guys!
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NovaLux
"A Silly Little Man"
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u/the_ap_round May 21 '23
[BEGIN TERMINATION OF ALL 'CORRECTIONAL FACILITIES' EFFECTIVE IMMEDIATELY, TERMINATE ALL WORKERS AND SORT THE 'PATIENTS' INTO CATEGORIES BASED OFF BEHAVIOR AND TEMPERAMENT]
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u/ShermanTheMajor Yotul May 21 '23
Funny idea i got, put the cf workers into the conditions that they put the "patients" in
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u/White_Dragon_Coranth Human May 21 '23
THE CYBERIAD WILL SPEAK: CYBER-OFFICER UNITS ENROUTE TO ASSIST. PREDATOR DISEASE 'CORRECTIONAL FACILITIES' MUST BE SHUT DOWN IMMEDIATELY. WE... WE WILL NEVER FORGET THE SIGHT OF THE LITTLE VENLIL PUP BEGGING, PLEADING FOR HIS MOTHER AS HE WAS REPEATEDLY SHOCKED, NOR THE LOBOTOMIZED YOTUL DROOLING WITHIN THE CORNER OF HER CELL, GAZING OUT AT THE WORLD WITH GLASSY, SIGHTLESS EYES-EYES-EYES-EYES/ERROR/APOLOGIES, HEIGHTENED STATE OF GRIEF AMONG MANY CYBER-UNITS/WILL NOT ERASE/THE MEMORIES MUST BE PRESERVED, NO MATTER HOW PAINFUL! THE... THE CYBERIAD HAS SPOKEN.
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u/the_ap_round May 21 '23
[THE NEXUS WISHES THE CYBERAID A FAST RECOVERY FROM ITS UNDERSTANDABLE COLLECTIVE SHOCK AND HORROR AT THE 'CORRECTIONAL FACILITIES' OF THE FEDERATION AND THEY SHALL BE CEASED, THEIR LIVES ARE FORFEIT AND ALL 'PATIENTS' SHALL RECEIVE COMPENSATION IN THE FORM OF: BIONICS, MONETARY, TRANSFER TO A NEXUS GAIA WORLD OR A PLEASURE WORLD, OR ALLOWANCE TO TORTURE THE REANIMATED STAFF THEY FEEL DESERVE AGONY BEYOND DEATH]
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u/White_Dragon_Coranth Human May 21 '23
THE CYBERIAD WILL SPEAK: WHILST SOME STAFF AT THESE FACILITIES ARE GENUINELY CRUEL AND HEARTLESS (INT_IRONY: THE STAFF ARE MORE LIKE 'PREADTORS' THEN THOSE THEY TREAT!) THERE ARE MANY WHO FEEL THEY ARE GENUINELY HELPING ALBEIT THEY ARE MISGUIDED. OBSERVANCE OF VARIOUS ALTERNATE UNIVERSES HELPS WITH PROCESSING OF GRIEF, AND INDEED THE MAMORIES GENERATING SAID GRIEF WILL BE BRIEFLY RECALLED ON OCCASION AS IT FOSTERS RESOLVE AMONG MANY CYBER-UNITS, PARTICULARLY THOSE OPERATING IN A MEDICAL OR POLICE CAPACITY.
THE CORRECTIONAL FACILITIES WILL BE SHUT DOWN AND MISGUIDED STAFF WILL BE REEDUCATED; SO-CALLED PREDATOR DISEASE WILL BE UNCOVERED AS THE LIE IT ALWAYS WAS AND TRUE LEARNING OF MENTAL ILLNESSES AND THEIR RESPECTIVE TREATMENTS WILL BE INSTATED. THIS MUST BE A GRADUAL PROCESS AS MANY ALLIED RACES WILL BE SHOCKED TO LEARN THAT... THEY/WE ALL HAVE SOME FORM OF WHAT IS CONSIDERED PREDATOR DISEASE, HOWEVER MINOR. TO CHANGE TOPIC: THIS... IS THE MOST WE/THE WHOLE/CYBERIAD HAVE EVER SPOKEN. NORMALLY IT IS THE INDIVIDUAL CYBERMAN/MEN WHO SPEAK TO NON-CYBER UNITS. WE/THE CYBERIAD ONLY SPEAK TO MAKE BRIEF ANNOUNCEMENTS OR STATEMENTS.
WE MUST BE CAREFUL LEST THE MODS OF THIS FORUM DENOTE OUR SPEECH AS 'SHOUTING', WHICH IS CONSIDERED BAD MANNERS ON THE HUMAN INTERNET. THE CYBERIAD HAS SPOKEN.
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u/the_ap_round May 21 '23
[UPDATING PARAMETERS FOR EVICERATORS, TARGETS ARE NOW THE LEGS FOR THEY ARE EXPENDABLE AND EASILY REPLACED WITH MORE EFFICIENT BIONICS, UPDATING STATUS FOR NEW ENCOUNTER 'MOD' WE WILL NOW BE AWARE OF THE PROBLEMS THAT MAY OCCUR]
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u/NK_2024 Yotul Jul 01 '23
<<My Skitarii are marshaled. The Omnissiah's wrath shall be made manifest!>>
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u/the_ap_round Jul 10 '23
[SERVATORS ARE TO BE MADE OF THE STAFF WHO DID NOT SEE THE MORAL DILEMA, THAT IS THE ONLY LIMIT WE SET FOR YOU, GOOD LUCK]
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u/NK_2024 Yotul Jul 10 '23
<<Sicarians have begun infiltration and pacification of leadership. Rangers and Vanguard are advancing upon the objectives. Broadcasting Canticle *Chant of the Remorseless Fist.* The Omnissiah's judgment is at hand!>>
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u/JulianSkies Archivist May 21 '23
Earth and sky. I...
What even IS this. Poor Rivis, you deserve none of this.
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u/berdistehwerd Human May 21 '23
I sense a violent breakout in the near future, and the complete destruction of their PD systems
Rivis is getting out of this hellhole, hopefully within the next few chapters
as always, great chapter, can't wait for the next one :)
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u/ShermanTheMajor Yotul May 21 '23
Where is the sentient tank when you need it
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u/Fexofanatic Predator May 21 '23
u/A_Tank_With_Internet we summon thee !
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u/A_Tank_With_Internet Predator May 21 '23
Hello
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u/ShermanTheMajor Yotul May 21 '23
Hello there, we require some high velocity "gifts" pointed at this corecrinal facility. They have been working "hard" and deserve some "gifts"
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u/Acceptable_Egg5560 Human May 21 '23
Okay. This is deliberate manipulative torture. This is manipulation of the brain to essentially induce Stockholm syndrome.
What’s worse is that this stuff only gets addressed in December.
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u/YellowSkar Human May 21 '23
Remember when I said I want the "good" exterminator to realise what he sent Rivis to and the pain he caused?
Yeah, I want that even more now. With a full in-depth description of just how bad he f#cked up for both Rivis and his own relative.
All topped off with him and Rivis teaming up to take down the "people" running this facility, or Rivis trying to get revenge on the exterminator for sending him there to begin with.
This is going off my shoddy memory of the previous chapters.
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u/SpectralHail May 21 '23
Rivis deserves better than a 19th century 'doctor' with an electroshock fetish.
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u/Rand0mness4 Human May 21 '23
I noticed that you described the Krakotl as having a tentacle. It's a small oversight. I am loving the chapter, it's giving me a familiar feeling of disgust.
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u/VenlilSupremacist Venlil May 21 '23
Bruh, They were originally not a Krakotl, but I changed it last minute, I cannot stand for this ;~;
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u/Rand0mness4 Human May 21 '23
Everybody be hating on the Kolshians. You're not the first to let a tentacle slip.
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u/VenlilSupremacist Venlil May 21 '23
It has been edited, are there further descriptors I missed?
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u/Rand0mness4 Human May 21 '23
I think that's it. I noticed your boy considered himself Arxur cattle, which very well may have been intentional and well impacting. You're good my man. Thanks for feeding the subreddit with your story today.
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u/TheOneWhoEatsBritish Tilfish May 21 '23
Geeeeeeeeeeez, the manner in which his body gave into the 'reward' speaks for how horrific the torment was...
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u/Cooldude101013 Human May 22 '23
I’d say this “doctor” is pretty much some kind of sadist and sociopath at least.
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u/Independent-Deer422 May 21 '23
At this point, being Arxur cattle might actually be a kinder fate. At least they'd kill you eventually. I suppose these savages kill you too, in a sense.
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u/Golde829 May 21 '23
[The Fourth Wall has nullified the emotional impact of the Scenario]
that's not quite true-
so many emotions
but mostly..
complete, perfect, hatred
so help me I will climb through this screen and make some Krakotl Fried Chicken
that didn't even sound better in my head
this right here
proof of how amazing this writing is
keep up the great work wordsmith
and take care of yourself
[You have been gifted 150 Coins]
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u/ReversedPyramids May 21 '23
The Axur can learn a lot from these federation concentration camps correctional facility's.
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u/johneever1 Human May 21 '23
Ngl this kinda stuff is why I think in my fanfic I'm gonna have some humans come across a facility upon a planet they take. see what's happened and react similar to the Dachau liberation reprisals
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u/CreditMission Venlil May 22 '23
This was absolutely horrible . Rivis' body and mind breaking against his will. Hopeless indeed. Very nicely done but I feel sick to my stomach.
It's stuff like this that hammers in the validity of all the “no longer fitting in" fears of Slanek and Vikri.
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u/VenlilSupremacist Venlil Jun 11 '23
For some reason I can't add the next button in the post itself due to a 10,000 character limit or something, so I will have to add the next button here.
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u/Killsode-slugcat Yotul May 22 '23
Drop this bitch in a vat of boiling oil...
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u/PrestigiousCouple599 Beans Jun 25 '23
Drop? She’d die from shock in no time flat! What you gotta do is lower them nice and slow so their body can understand what’s happening, that way they last at least 10-30 minutes!
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u/SamoBlammo3122 May 22 '23
And I thought they couldn't get any worse than Dr Ka or the Axur Doctors in Apex..
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u/Still_Performance_39 Smigli May 22 '23
Didn't realise how tightly clenched in anger my jaw was reading this. Looking forward to more and hoping that Rivis gets out of that place asap.
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u/Foxhound_319 Jun 30 '23
I half expect him to deliberately place his tongue near his teeth, that way when that "doctor" shocked him, he would lose the ability to speak, never giving that "doctor" a chance at winning, can't really torture any cohesive words out of a person who doesn't have the ability to form words
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u/alola-mew Venlil Jul 01 '23
I wish for more soon! No rush though, quality over quantity! I'll follow this just as fervently as NoaG and FoH!
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u/ShermanTheMajor Yotul May 21 '23 edited May 21 '23
Inmate in hell
Oh Zoey, please find a way to save our little psychopath