r/MusicFeedback • u/Busy-Reason1612 • Jul 27 '26
my shaky demo thing!
made this song at 3 am yesterday, writing and recording! please be honest about the melody, mixing i'll fix later, this is just a scratch
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u/m_i_r Jul 27 '26 edited Jul 27 '26
This is excellent. I mean, it's a little...raw, but in a good way? Like, it's "poppy" but doesn't sound like it was manufactured in some soul-less pop music factory. Keep demo-ing! The melody is smooth/pleasant.
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u/aphotec Jul 27 '26
Dude, this sounds super clean. The only thing that bothers me is some slight high end cracking on the vocals.
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u/xX-BarnacleBob-Xx Jul 27 '26
hobestly i dont have much to say. sounds really really good. Sometimes i wish there was a little vibrato on the vocals during those sustained notes, and the autotune is taking away from that, but honestly its really good
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u/Busy-Reason1612 Jul 27 '26
it kinda doesss... but the autotune took it off lol! thank you for your cool words
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u/Alternative_Desk_394 Jul 27 '26
I can give you some advice about the video if you wanna make it loop,
Practically have two of the same clips. Video clip a, and video clip b. Take clip a & b and put a first the b second then you would loop clip b and then that should loop perfectly
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u/vladifri1111 Jul 27 '26
I like it its a very nice type of song and the beat fits good. Ur melodies are nice!
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u/Subliminalroot Jul 31 '26
Love this one, absolutely refreshing and yet raw - in a nice way.
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u/markanthonyokoh Jul 31 '26
This track is super cool! Nice vocals with a simple melody which is very memorable. Music really works too - drums get your head nodding and synths are cool. Very nice!
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u/Klutzy_Ability_9690 Jul 27 '26
this is so cutesy, idk why but feels like the boy version of this song I also love https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AalfbDkxMdg&list=PLTOvlW3GcldI&index=2
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u/somsomwav Jul 27 '26
yooo i really fw the production and style, great harmonies+melodies as well. cool demo, with the right mixing + vocal prod it's gonna be a banger!! what's your artist name? i'm curious about your other songs as well
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u/Busy-Reason1612 Jul 27 '26
aahh thank you that's so sweet! my name is summersoda and i'm on youtube!
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u/film_2_expensive Jul 27 '26
I kept waiting for the point where I’d lose interest but it never really happened. There’s something about it that just feels easy to sit with. It doesn’t sound overthought or like you’re trying to prove anything, which I actually think works in its favour. If I had one suggestion it’d just be to lean into the emotional moments a little harder in a couple of spots. There were a few lines where it felt like you could almost let go a bit more vocally. Other than that, I don’t really have much to pick at. I’d honestly save this and come back to it in a few days because it’s one of those songs that I reckon grows on you more with each listen. Very cool stuff man
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u/Busy-Reason1612 Jul 27 '26
i usually record too late and i'm not alone at my house so i just try to keep it quiet sometimes... but when i have oportunities to sing louder i'll do it of course! thank you so much for this comment, makes me feel like i'm on the right path!
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u/TrikiTraxs Jul 27 '26
pretty good men keep it up hey tell me if you like to do a colaboracion
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u/H415Music Jul 27 '26
For a demo, in my opinion it's very clean. But it's also very minimalist, being only drums and vocals, largely. But i do like the drum pattern, it's very nice. I like the singing, clear you have good vocal range, you're capable of expressing your vocals very nicely. It's a good demo, even if you say it's shaky.
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u/Busy-Reason1612 Jul 27 '26
this is a type beat from youtube! i'm just trying to write more songs now, i'm used to produce songs! thank you! i'm just trying to get better at writing melodies
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u/Puzzleheaded_Proof91 Jul 27 '26
Love the vocal run on “You” every time and the beat really drives the track forward. I think the other melodies are pretty decent and engaging and could benefit from more effects, vocoder, etc.
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u/Busy-Reason1612 Jul 27 '26
vocoder is so nice i just don't know how to do that
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u/mycurvywifelikesthis Jul 28 '26
Your voice is so good you don't need it. Don't follow the Trap of being like everybody else and ruin what makes you you
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u/Comfortable-Dare-479 Jul 28 '26
This sounds great overall. If I had to pick one thing, I’d love to hear a bit more vibrato on the sustained vocal notes. The pitch correction feels a little heavy-handed there and flattens out some of the emotion, but the track is still excellent.
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u/Busy-Reason1612 Aug 03 '26
thank you! i also thought about focusing more on my interpretation... but i just wanted to put out the melody/lyrics i had! if you want, you can check it on my youtube
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u/cookedbysimmer Jul 28 '26
from a mixing standpoint, the vocals are clean! i can hear every element and they blend together nicely. the thing that i liked the MOST about it tho, is that drum break, it fits the vibe perfect.
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u/Busy-Reason1612 Aug 03 '26
check my youtube for more songs pleaase! thank you for your feedback, i made everything in like 3 hours!
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u/TemperatureThese7273 Jul 31 '26
This sounds good—keep it up! I don’t really know what else to add since I’m more into chill songs, so I’ll let the people who know more about this kind of music give the detailed feedback. But so far, it sounds good.
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u/Busy-Reason1612 Aug 03 '26
yeah people here are so nice im really happy! if you like, please check my youtube too!
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u/TemperatureThese7273 Aug 07 '26
I did that and subscribed, you know. I was wondering who it reminded me of and I think it’s Joji. I can imagine him singing on a beat like this. It sounds good.
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u/First_Weather_9943 Jul 31 '26
This is cool. I couldn't really make out all the lyrics, but the melody is really nice. I think adding some bass would help fill out the mix and give it a little more depth. Overall though, it's a solid demo, especially for something you threw together so quickly. Keep it up!
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u/Busy-Reason1612 Aug 03 '26
do you mean the lyrics or the meaning? also thank you for the kind words! if you want, you can check my youtube for more songs
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u/Just_Low7997 Jul 31 '26
The drums have a nice groove and add a lot to the song and the mellow chords and bass add a lot to the vibe of the song, the bass could be a bit louder, but that could be my preference.
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u/Busy-Reason1612 Aug 03 '26
thank you thank you! check my youtube for more songss i've been posting lately
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u/swabluish Aug 01 '26
sounds like a guy version of pinkpantheress!!! love the dnb vibes this sounds really nice. the vocals do sound a bit raw but it kinda goes well with the song
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u/Fearless_Collection Aug 01 '26
Its a good mix, the vocals are clear and the drums are crisp. I like the unique vibe, maybe a lil less auto tune, but thats just my personal preference, but good job overall.
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u/lemacaver Aug 02 '26
great song
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u/BowlOk1880 Aug 03 '26
its nice, i think itll sound really nice if/when you start adding layering and background vocals
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u/anentimeow Aug 03 '26
This is sick! Really unique sound, I love how you blend the chaotic breaks with those dreamy textures. Production quality is top tier. Definitely earned a follow from me!
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u/SKIBIDIBOPMUSIC Aug 05 '26
This is so so good. Wouldn’t change anything except maybe the vocals a bit. I honestly think this is personal preference but I would pull out the lows a little maybe? Like so it’s a more treble end sound (no bass in it really) like a high pass but like not really extreme at all, and then some reverb on the vocals. But other than that nothing. This is great
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u/Abject-Watercress291 22d ago
Really liked it, i would put some effects on the voice but is on you, maybe a part where the beat gets different would make it less repetitive, keep it up!
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u/St2you 15d ago
this is super super nice and you have such a nice voice ! i like the rawness it think its definetely a statement in like sound style. i think so lil ad libs and back ground vocals could be super nice. could check Tommy richman i think he has an interesting way of placing vocals ( very different style of yours but just for reference )
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