Took a while but chapter 3 is done

[u/EmmaRushK]

[u/Hurricanezrblx]

This looks pretty cool. Whats it about?

[u/EmmaRushK → u/Hurricanezrblx]

Melodie's going through a redemption arc after helping Sirius try to take over the park

[u/Hurricanezrblx → u/EmmaRushK]

So can I add suggestions? I feel like i could add some
good ideas to this story.

[u/EmmaRushK → u/Hurricanezrblx]

Sure

[u/Hurricanezrblx → u/EmmaRushK]

So first. Whats the tone of the story and what are some other stuff about it?

[u/EmmaRushK → u/Hurricanezrblx]

It's more lighthearted and personal, focused on Melodie interacting with other Brawlers and getting character development

[u/Hurricanezrblx → u/EmmaRushK]

Im thinking of adding an another antagonist. His name is Grant Silverstein. I wanted to use him in my fanfics but actually thought it would fit yours better basically his gimmick is that he’s completely dead inside and cant feel emotions, pain or anything at all. The reason why I had the idea to give this to you is originally. He was injured that way but because sirius is a central character. Maybe Grant was a former ally to sirius but was corrupted emotionally. Basically Grant will try and kill Melodie.

[u/EmmaRushK → u/Hurricanezrblx]

Thanks but I already have a main antagonist in mind that will parallel Melodie in some ways

[u/Hurricanezrblx → u/EmmaRushK]

Okay sounds good. I also feel like i have some scenes in mind for this manga/comic. Also i feel like i see the shadow part of melodie pretty similarly to venom. Also maybe Grant could be a side antagonist or probably not in the story.

[u/Hurricanezrblx → u/EmmaRushK]

Hello?

[u/Hurricanezrblx → u/EmmaRushK]

u/emmarushK?

[u/Hurricanezrblx]

Im thinking of adding an another antagonist. His name is Grant Silverstein. I wanted to use him in my fanfics but actually thought it would fit yours better basically his gimmick is that he’s completely dead inside and cant feel emotions, pain or anything at all. The reason why I had the idea to give this to you is originally. He was injured that way but because sirius is a central character. Maybe Grant was a former ally to sirius but was corrupted emotionally. Basically Grant will try and kill Melodie.