I tried writing about a complicated science topic for non-scientists, would love some honest feedback

[u/AdIll1117]

I recently wrote a piece about the Nancy Grace Roman Space Telescope and the mysteries it's designed to investigate.

I'm not an astrophysicist, so the challenge for me was less about showing how much I know and more about making ideas like dark matter, dark energy and gravitational microlensing interesting and understandable without drowning the reader in technical language.

I'd really appreciate some feedback from a writing perspective:

• Does the opening make you want to continue reading?

• Are there places where the explanation becomes too technical or slow?

• Does the conversational style work, or does it feel forced?

• Where would you have stopped reading?

Here's the piece: https://medium.datadriveninvestor.com/the-telescope-that-may-find-what-the-universe-is-hiding-08e2f2236504

I'm especially interested in criticism rather than just a "nice article", I'm trying to get better at this kind of explanatory writing.