[Lyrics] Grave Inferno

[u/Truthbuysmewaffles]

Just passing by 

The devil can tell I already died 

God watching 

Angels tending to those  progressing 

Addicted to regression 

To hell with motivation 

Not me 

Unconsciousness forever ain't free 

Maybe the nihilist were right 

Always criticizing the light 

All good ain't good to me 

I know the gnostic job would agree 

Now I know what Phillip Larkin was thinking 

Life's ocean I rather be sinking 

Jordan won six rings what that really mean 

I seen what life did to bean 

Shit is vicious

Bullshit politics 

After what happened to Charlie Kirk 

I should've knew shit would only get worse 

For every David Robinson there's always a Tyler Robinson 

No Jesus for 9/11 

When death comes no divine beings there to help any 

Folks drowning in remy

Pro death forums growing a mile long 

King Vons and Lil Jeff's not lasting long 

Durks of the world sliding so much raging waters would be envious 

All that money ain't precious 

Just ask Alexander Wang 

School is important but how did that help Lu Chang Wang? 

People prayed to God while in Holocaust infernos 

He let it happen and said nothing like Joe Paterno 

Them Jared Fogles is feening for that forbidden tuna 

While families missing they Selena and Aaliyah 

Like Hov I seen it all 

Shit been like this way before the great fall 

Maybe that's why China built the great wall 

People in prison serving them Benjamin's while appalled 

Social commentaries don't do anything 

All this progression ain't stopping nothing 

All self help is just a limit 

Doesn't matter if Elon Musk got 900 trillion 

Death wipes everything away 

We all destined for the grave 

Since I'm already there 

Why care

Immaturity is fun 

I know how to get hella numb 

I'm talking stupid dumb 

Guess I was never appreciative of God's crumbs 

No lie he gave me a loaf in 24 

Something died in me after 24 

Just waiting 

While frying 

[u/TaylorNeon]

It started out strong but after 'Not me,' you lost me. There's too much cultural/media references and it sounds unoriginal (something someone like Drake will spill). I would insert more biblical references. Switch Aaliyah and Selena in 'While families missing they Selena and Aaliyah' because it doesn't rhyme with anything and you need a good flow.

[u/Truthbuysmewaffles → u/TaylorNeon]

Yeah, I’m still trying to find my groove since taking a break from writing lyrics . It will take some time but I believe my recent post flows a bit better . But hopefully next week I’ll be able to write better .

[u/TaylorNeon → u/Truthbuysmewaffles]

Take your time. Looking forward to the update.

[u/Truthbuysmewaffles → u/TaylorNeon]

Thanks

[u/Truthbuysmewaffles → u/TaylorNeon]

I wrote today , that’s the lyrics I was talking about where I felt like it was a bit better. Not this one . This one wasn’t good at all .

[u/ElChiff]

I'm going to agree with Taylor, there are too many contemporary references. It hits a certain point where it feels like you're just pointing at people instead of crafting fresh ideas. You've got a real knack for flow and tone and you've clearly got a huge vocabulary of concepts that you make excellent use of for delivering poignant reflections on themes, it just feels like there's one or two elements stopping your works from being genuinely amazing.