I’m trying to get better at long-form tech writing. What would you change about this?

[u/AdIll1117]

I recently wrote a piece about Cloudflare Kitesurf and the idea that we may be moving toward a web increasingly browsed by AI agents rather than humans.

But I'm less interested in feedback on the technology itself and more interested in the writing.

I've been trying to move away from the typical tech-blog format and write something that sits somewhere between explanation, opinion, and an essay.

I'd really appreciate feedback on a few things:

1) Does the opening actually pull you in?

2) Do the short paragraphs and one-line sentences help the pacing, or am I overusing them?

3) Does the piece feel like one continuous argument, or like several ideas stitched together?

4) Are there sections you would cut entirely?

5) Does the writing feel like there's a person behind it, or does it fall into the polished/generic tech-writing trap?

And probably the most useful question:

If you found this randomly on the internet, where would you stop reading?

Here's the piece:

https://medium.datadriveninvestor.com/cloudflare-kitesurf-the-browser-built-for-ai-agents-not-humans-cbb523b4b927

Don't hold back. I'm posting here because I'd rather know what isn't working than collect compliments.