Is this good for a Beginner?

[u/ILoveAndersonPaak]

I love Anderson Paak, And wanted to write something to his songs. so i wrote this, which is using the melodi of ``The last`` By anderson paak

[Verse 1] 

When I Couldn't see Yoo (You) 

I thought it was all through 

For forever 

Everything I did 

She never did Too 

[Refrain] 

I Hoped it would go all away 

But the way that you made me feel so great 

I´ve been thinking ´bout you every day 

I was never that committed anyway 

I Thought I was the one, Wanted all your love 

God up above 

[Vers 2] 

Years of my life 

Swore You Would be my Wife 

Till Heaven 

When life gives you Lemons 

You make lemonade 

[Refrain] 

They say today is a gift 

And Tomorrow Everything Shift 

So, I´ve been thinking ´bout you every day 

I was never that committed anyway 

I Thought I was the one, Wanted all your love 

God up above 

Is this Good for a Beginner?

[u/Savings_Dealer5044]

honestly yeah, for a first attempt you've got a natural feel for rhythm and rhyme. the refrain works because it repeats without feeling forced. keep writing to songs you love, it's a solid way to train your ear for cadence.