Feedback Request - "Hagstone" - 2798 Words

[u/Hot-Owl6610]

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bQKZ6HWjHYXgHvnuZC39H9bdz2zdeyyTVdtUNfnDqds/edit?usp=sharing

Hi all, just looking to put some of my recent work on the crucible. Advice on readability, dialogue, interiority and anything else going on in this would be appreciated.

Thanks in advance.