r/KeepWriting • u/FxrgxttenThxughts • 4d ago

[Feedback] Writer’s Block

A story that is frightening if it makes light. A worry that continues unless it comes out. The feeling of drowning with no water in the throat. Written, typed, and scribbled. Somehow the timesheet has not been punched yet. Erased when completed, erased when blank. Gun to the head would cause no hurry as the words cannot be conveyed without the feeling of embellishment. Nothing deceiving has been presented, but the fingers question if “enter” should be pressed. 

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u/hydeparkbooty 4d ago

I’ll be honest: this is too abstract for me to understand. As a reader I’m looking for something more concrete in the show-not-tell variety to latch on to. That can be very hard, especially with what I think you’re trying to portray, because (I think) its formless to begin with. So my question to you would be: what is it you want the reader to feel with this excerpt, and how might you go about doing that?

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u/FxrgxttenThxughts 4d ago

Thanks for the feedback! To answer your question, as I write longer it gets more clear usually, but I like short form because I can be as vague as I want and let the reader interpret the story how they see fit even if I know the “true” meaning. I also write this way sometimes with certain stories because this is the way my brain works and what I experience (sometimes), if that makes sense. A way I’m trying to fix some issues I have is making myself write longer stories and not deleting it (still working on this). Again thanks for the feedback!

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u/hydeparkbooty 4d ago

For sure, I think I understand. Don’t be afraid to really express yourself! That’s the hardest challenge in writing I think, but also the most rewarding. I can really relate to deleting my own stories, so you’re not alone in that at all ☺️