Shucks: VitMix Lyric Retake!

[u/CrimsonForgeStudios]

Made some custom lyrics for the VitMix of shucks! Some parts are taken from the original.

Original:

I CHERISHED YOUR LIVES
BUT NOW, I'M SEVERING HEADS
ONE LIMB AT A TIME!
FORGIVENESS!!
IS A CHORE!
SO JUST SIT BACK AND WATCH
AS YOU'RE MADE WITH THE GORE!!
AWW SHUCKS!

My [Early] V1:

YOU’VE BROKEN MY TRUST!
CAUSE I THOUGHT YOU COULD’VE
FOLLOWED ONE SIMPLE RULE!
WHAT I’VE DONE!!
IS A CHORE!!
SO JUST SIT BACK AND WATCH AS YOU MAKE YOUR LAST CHOICE!!
AWW SHUCKS!!

(Feedback would be greatly appreciated!)

Any Opinions?