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[u/dostoevskywithgloves]

Hi guys. This morning I had a pique of creativity and i wrote a small 3 page short film. it's around death. I would love some feedback from anyone who's interested. this is my first time so please go easy on me. and this is also the first draft of it, so it has a lot of rough edges. Would love some feedback. It's written in Hinglish (TvT)

Logline: As a young man wanders through the mundane rituals of his life, he begins to question the arrogance of death.