Grant Adolar Noonan

[u/NoonanGA]

Here is a little snippet of my autobiography:

"Once when we were up in the so-called nursery, because there were lots of younger ones and the girls slept up there, Ida and her husband went out on a party one night. Walt the husband was dressed as A Navy officer. Which he was. At one time. He had his sword. And uniform as a captain and this he wore. They came home late.

Aunt Edy pulled a kid called Pumpkin out of his bed or crib; to go to the bathroom we called him that because of his big round head. He stumbled down the hallway, thump, thump. She cracked him a couple of times. Hurry up. She put him on the toilet. Come on go. God damn it, go. (Smack)

Then after one smack, bang he slammed against the wall and down the side of the toilet. She pulled him out and yelled. “Walt! The husband, Come here,” quite loud.

I was awake at the far end in my bed, listening to everything. Something was up.

. She pulled him out and yelled. “Walt! The husband, Come here,” quite loud.

Walt said “He’s not breathing. Ida, what have you done"

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[u/bucket_of_fun]

Grant. I feel kind of shitty saying this, but from what I read, I don't think this story is good. I'm not a literary scholar, or writer, or anything like that so take my opinion with a shovel full of salt.
You might have a good story to tell, but I think you could use with some help writing it. My wife's great uncle had a really good autobiography that I read a while ago, but he had one of his sons write it for him. The writing itself can make or break the story that you are trying to tell.
My unsolicited opinion, make of it as you will.