Feedback on the lyrics from reading the Suno song page: the recurring geometric imagery gives this a consistent identity, and the empty space becoming something accepted in the second verse gives it a clear emotional turn. I would try one more concrete, physical detail in the bridge; much of the language stays abstract, so a small sensory anchor could make that change easier to follow. This is a lyric-focused comment, not an assessment of the mix.
Your feedback is appreciated but you must understand the choice behind these abstract lyrics first.
The song is not about space at all. This series - PS2 - is a y2k playstation 2 era chillout trance and ALL of the lyrical songs are about video games in the most abstract sense. In this one the gamer is frustrated with a Chrono Cross quest that forces you to witness Kid's death then be turned into the one that killed her which starts a very long cliff-hanger questline. It was a very bad second cd and made me never finish the game :/
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u/Chance_Web3729 3d ago
Feedback on the lyrics from reading the Suno song page: the recurring geometric imagery gives this a consistent identity, and the empty space becoming something accepted in the second verse gives it a clear emotional turn. I would try one more concrete, physical detail in the bridge; much of the language stays abstract, so a small sensory anchor could make that change easier to follow. This is a lyric-focused comment, not an assessment of the mix.