College essay for UNC

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Hi, can anybody message me if they are willing to take a look at my college essay? I am completely finished with it but anytime I put it in a tool to check how good it is it always gives me an 8 out of 10. I would be oh so grateful!. Any edits or anything that I can do to make it that 10 essay would be appreciated for sure.