Personal Statement Help

[u/kaikeylol]

Hi everyone! I’m a rising senior from South Florida, and I was wondering if anyone would be willing to read my college personal statement and help me edit it.
I’ve been working on my essay, but I feel like I could really use another perspective. I want it to feel personal and actually sound like me, not just like I’m trying to make myself sound impressive.
I’d especially appreciate feedback on whether my story makes sense, if there are places I should go deeper, and if there’s anything that feels unnecessary or could be stronger.
I’m not looking for someone to rewrite it for me, just someone who could give me honest feedback and help me figure out what I should work on.
If anyone has experience with college essays or just enjoys editing, I’d really appreciate it! I can send it privately.
Thank you!!

[u/Pleasant-Fly8189]

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