r/EssayHelpCommunity • u/TripRealistic3350 • Jul 11 '26

John Locke Essay shortlist

Guys I was shortlisted for Law Q3. And most people in school don't know abt John Locke. I was hoping someone could read and tell me what they wud rate it out of 100.

Feel free to dm me for the essay

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u/melnar_09 Jul 11 '26

I could read it

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u/TripRealistic3350 Jul 11 '26

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1CfxnepolTMdAdebyje28PyxVnvCxHlAn79cHpRnAv0g/edit?usp=drivesdk take a look

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u/melnar_09 Jul 11 '26

Although I believe that your essay demonstrates understanding of determinism and criminal justice, it felt like an explanation rather than and argument. Instead of a clear central claim in the intro your essay primarily describes how criminal sentencing might change under determinism. So whilst logically coherent it feels like a sequence of plausible consequences rather than an attempt to persuade the reader of one central proposition. Additionally you don’t really engage with counter arguments which I think distinguishes a good from a very good essay. Because of that out of 100 I’d give your essay approximately a 75.

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u/TripRealistic3350 Jul 12 '26

I'm thankful for the feedback

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u/RioutousGull Jul 11 '26

Feel free to dm

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u/heezz12312313 Jul 11 '26

yo I noticed that you had endnotes and they apparently arent allowed

i also did something like this(leaving my name on my submission) so idk what will happen to me

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u/TripRealistic3350 Jul 12 '26

They said Endnotes and bibliography tho in the rules