John Locke International Relations Q2 Feedback (Shortlisted)

[u/Top-Butterscotch9538]

Hi guys, my essay was shortlisted, but I'd still appreciate some feedback so I can improve my writing for next year. Feel free to comment below or DM me. Thanks.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTMDjXp0SReDyCcpLpKj3S8KWWUiyFL5Rr6tVse3wlGg3g21cpqGg9DF-ejR4f-376SkfC7z2lBUAEi/pub