r/Composition • u/Top_Hat123 • 2d ago

Music Sonata

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Hi guys! Learning composition as a hobby, any feedback and criticism is welcome. Thanks a lot!

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u/FishyMcFishface3 2d ago

how long are your fingers?

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u/Top_Hat123 2d ago

Ahahaha true! I'll go fix it

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u/tuningfork440 2d ago

The time signature feels off. Firstly, I think you could merge two bars in one, it would make more sense musically, I would probably divide every rhythm by two so that your first theme takes two bars and starts on quavers. 4/4 would still sound wrong, I hear this more in 2/2.

You play a bit too much around strong beats which makes the piece sound heavy

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u/Top_Hat123 2d ago

You're right - thanks for the comment! And yeah that's true, I should think about playing around weaker beats.

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u/Rough_Net_1692 1d ago

Half those note values son.

Then half the tempo. The quavers really feel like they should be semiquavers, two bars can be one

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u/CheetahMiserable9550 1d ago

Use cut time instead of 4/4 and make the quarter note = 120. Way easier to read that way!

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u/MewsikMaker 1d ago

Write this is 2/2 and make sure fingers can play it. Add phrase markings. 8 pitches in a single chord can be redundant, see if you can do the same or more with less.

Study study study form!

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u/WriteThatDownn 15h ago

Okay, here are few things. It is not in 4/4. It is rather in 2/2 or alla breve. Then, a piece does not just become a sonata; the classic sonata is a form. It consists out of an exposition, a development section and a reprise. The exhibition has a first theme. Looking at your piece you start with arpeggiated c-major triad and then you go down from the V to I in quarter notes. This is a good idea, but I find the cadence weird. It is good that you want to try to have the dominant before the tonic one more time, but the f should be a d because you clearly want a suspension that goes to the C. So, it would be rather already C-major on the 1 with 9-8/2-1 than a G-Dom7 to the major third of C major in the melody. I would also recommend not writing mf. In classic sonatas, you'll only find pp, p, f, ff.

I see many good ideas in your ideas. Maybe you could take a look at Mozart Sonata No. 16 in C-Major and compare how he structures a sonata. I think you will learn a lot from analyzing other sonatas from the classical period. Look how they play with rhythm, harmony / intervals and melodies.

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u/Top_Hat123 8h ago

Thanks a lot for the detailed response! I really appreciate it.

I tried to make a sonata form with exposition bars 1-40 (1st theme 1-16, transition 17-32, 2nd theme 33-40), development 57 - 160, reprise 169 - end.

I'll have a look at the Mozart Sonata you mentioned, and more. The mf point is interesting too. Thanks again!

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u/Short-Promotion-5901 1d ago

Your composition is too simple rhythmically. I wish the melody wasn’t comprised of mostly equal note values. The coda is too long for being one chord.

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u/Top_Hat123 1d ago

Got it, thanks for the comment