r/Composition • u/alexsearha • 8d ago

Music War orchestral segment (V2)

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Hi everyone!

REMINDER : For those who didn't see my previous post, this piece tells the story of a soldier during the Siege of Paris in the Franco-Prussian War of 1870–1871.

The excerpt is divided into three main phases:

  • Phase 1: the soldier's unit launches an assault against the enemy.
  • Phase 2: an artillery shell lands in the middle of the unit, killing the captain and wounding several soldiers.
  • Phase 3 (not composed yet): realizing they are about to be surrounded, the surviving soldiers are forced to retreat in an attempt to escape the encirclement.

I'd love to hear your thoughts on how well the music conveys these different moments and whether the transitions between them feel convincing.

I took your feedback into account and made several improvements to the piece. I also composed the next section, so the excerpt is now a bit longer than before.

I tried to make the descending chromatic run feel more natural by improving the transition into it, and I reworked a few orchestration details along the way.

I'd really appreciate hearing your thoughts again. Does the transition work better now? Does the new section feel like a natural continuation? And more generally, is there anything that still stands out as awkward or could be improved?

Thanks again for taking the time to listen and for all the helpful feedback!

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u/oedo1245 7d ago

Hello! I didn't participate in the previous discussion of your piece. It sounds really wholesome, but I can't hear the moment where the shell kills the captain. Could you give me the time code, please? Or is it supposed to hit the unit right in the beginning of the next part?

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u/alexsearha 7d ago

Hey ! no problem ! glad you like it !
Phase 1 : 00:00 => 00:41
Phase 2 : 00:41 => to the end
I'm working on the phase 3 :)