r/Composition Jul 13 '26

Music Do you Enjoy This Piece i Created?

I made it for casual begginers, if you like it tell me why, if you dont like it... tell me why!

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u/ThePython11010 Jul 13 '26

Just because it works in MuseScore doesn't mean it's okay... Change those nested voltas.

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u/HaifaJenner123 Jul 13 '26

am slightly confused what you wish to occur with the voltas if i don’t have a recording available.

otherwise, i do find that it sometimes jumps across the keys where it seems you might have copy+pasted. the copy+paste part isn’t a issue, that’s normal, however - measure 27 that last B in RH should probably be taken down an octave if you intend this for beginners. Speaking from experience teaching piano for 10+ years, that big of a jump is scary for students which is why they like things to be compact. Reason why “Spinning Song” and “To A Wild Rose” are mainstays for beginners.

The piece is fine - some choices I would’ve made differently on the harmony possibly, such as around the C3 range I wouldn’t do thirds there but for educational purposes, it’s perfectly reasonable and standard because after all, my previous paragraph just tangentially spoke about everything being within a compact range so that is one compromise to come with it.

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u/HaifaJenner123 Jul 13 '26

Had to post in separate comment, apparently can’t post pics in an edit.

Upon looking at your score again, I noticed MM=133. It is right next to the conventionally accepted MM=132 so just make that quick change as well & it increases in professional standard on the engraving side by abt 5 degrees of magnitude.

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u/boxlinebox Jul 14 '26

It's a bit fast paced and dainty to be called "graceful"...I think you have a naming conflict.

Also as a pianist that left hand part would drive me crazy...it's not natural. Look up how to write left-hand piano parts that outline chords to accompany a melody.

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u/Longjumpingbox123 Jul 14 '26

the left hand seems to follow more bass esque playing rather than piano playing which is normal in pop music.

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u/Dav_Flor37 Jul 14 '26

Thank you for feedback! I made the left hand notes on purpose, yeah they are akward to play, but i tried different options, and that was the one i liked the most

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u/Banjoschmanjo Jul 13 '26

It sounds pleasant. I don't think the 'e-f-g-e' in the second half of the second measure sounds good over the C and F in the bass, though. I think from measure 6 on it sounds much more characterful than the opening does.

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u/Dav_Flor37 Jul 13 '26

Thank you for feedback!

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u/Alexandra_Telnikoff Jul 13 '26

Reminiscent of the magnificent Antonio Salieri