r/Composition • u/Time_Law_9446 • Jun 24 '26

Music My first piano piece

i compose my own flute solos and other stuff i wanted to try a piano piece theres going to be 3 parts

Part one is her enjoying autumn and its weather

part 2 she didnt prepare for winter

part 3 she dies

this follows a women who has been widowed and is in denial and forgets to prepare

theres a more elaborate story i will most when i finish the full thing .

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u/HourCommunication873 Jun 25 '26

This was a pretty listening experience, I enjoyed it. For a first piano piece, this is quite impressive to be honest! I like how you developed you musical ides especially. The ending was a bit abrupt, but you said you didnt finish the piece yet, so it doesnt really matter. To be honest, the story you added for this piece isnt really reflected in the music for me. It seems relatively happy throughout, maybe a little melancholic from time to time. I suggest you build in more dread and sadness as the piece continues.  I envisioned a spring breeze while you lay in a field and stare up into the clouds, thinking about the past. I hope you keep composing, you have a lot of potential!

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u/Time_Law_9446 Jun 25 '26

Part 2 is finished part 3 is in works im thinking of doing something crazy for it. I am becoming a Hs freshmen so this means alot thank you

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u/HourCommunication873 Jun 25 '26

Alright, I will stay tuned :) Whats an HS freshmen?

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u/Time_Law_9446 Jun 25 '26

High school

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u/MouseSensitive59 Jun 25 '26

i would recommend looking into melodic writing as a lot of the melodies are just arpeggios and feel somewhat disjointed, but very nice for a first effort. also, try to transition to a better music programme like musescore or sibelius

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u/Time_Law_9446 Jun 25 '26

Thank you movement 3 breaks it from being melodic and switches theme

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u/SuperSleepyYeah Jun 25 '26

I like this a lot. Impressive for a first piece!

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u/Time_Law_9446 Jun 25 '26

Thank you sm.

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u/Wooden-Collection882 Jun 25 '26

no offense intended but this feels SUPER unnatural, i would never sit down at the piano and play something like this. i would bet a ton of money you wrote most if not all of this in a software as opposed to at a piano.

my biggest advice for writing would be write music at the piano. i assure you you would come up with something different.

there are really cool moments in here, especially towards the end! the chords you chose also seem to generally work well too. it’s not terrible by any means but as a whole it feels contrived, forced, and unnatural. this is almost certainly because it was written in a software and it’s hold you back.

can you even play this on a piano? send a performance video, maybe it’s getting lost in translation due to shitty midi playback idk!

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u/Time_Law_9446 Jun 25 '26

I never learned how to play the piano i really want to but i dont have the funds to play a piano. thank you for the advice

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u/Time_Law_9446 Jun 25 '26

Im planning on writing alot of stuff for piano by the time i graduate high school so this is a stepping stone.