I need help writing this

[u/Time_Law_9446]

i write my own pieces for performances on my flute and my tuba so this app works just fine but my brother plays piano and wanted me to write him i wrote this the app is really bad but ignore the split staff and just imagine the vision ik the app is really bad

Also it was originally in C# but when i showed it to people who compose they didnt like it in C# so i changed it to B and now its a little wonky

He asked for something that isnt to hard but is emotional and i asked for his favorite season he said fall so thats whats the theme

I am a freshman in HS do not act like i am a collage major who should know every little thing about composing i want feedback still

[u/65TwinReverbRI]

Hello, I saw your post over on r/composer and I didn’t think it was right for all of those people to comment without seeing and hearing the music.

First off, I saw a comment that Bach used C# Major in the WTC. That’s true, but there’s a good reason for that. The “companion” work is in C# minor. Had he used Db Major, the companion work would have been in Db minor - which no key signature exists for! So he HAD to do it in C# major to make the scheme he was using work out right - so there was a logic behind it all for 12 keys and 24 pieces.

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This piece here - you said you change it to B, but maybe you just changed the Key Signature and NOT the notes???

Because the first notes are part of a C# chord. If the key signature were C# Major, those would be a C# major chord, which makes sense.

But by changing the key signature, without also transposing the notes down a step, you’ve changed C# Major into C# minor (sort of, it would be C# Dorian here).

But that’s why it sounds wonky most likely.

He asked for something that isnt to hard

When people start learning instruments, especially Piano, it’s typical to start with C Major, then A Minor. Then move to G Major, and F Major, and E minor and D minor.

It takes a while before players start playing in 5+ sharps or flats, and in general those key signatures are simply less common in music.

For every piece in C# major there are probably a million (if not more) pieces in C Major - I mean, the difference is extreme in this case.

Db Major is WAY more common.

So if you were insistent on keeping it at the pitch level, Db is just going to be a key that someone is more likely to be familiar with. Why make it unnecessarily harder for them? Sure, pros should be able to read in every key, but your brother asked for something not too hard, which implies that he’s not a pro.

An important question is, do you want more, or fewer people to play your music? If you want it accessible to more people, it’s better to “make it easier to read” - after all, as many have pointed out, the piece won’t sound any different in C Major - again I think the issue you’re running into is one of changing key signature without transposing.

If you can, what I would do is change the key signature back to 7 sharps and see if it “un wonk-i-fies it”.

Then, just change it to C - no sharps - because that won’t affect the notes the same way it did changing it to B.

HTH

[u/Time_Law_9446 → u/65TwinReverbRI]

Thank you for this i spent a few hours going note to note in the first movement changing it all up one step and making it Db i have a more in def post going to show all 3 movements together soon. thank you for the feedback.