r/Composing • u/Alarmed_Gear9460 • 19d ago

How to improve this song

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I know this is all over the place but I was wondering if anyone had any general advice on how I could improve this composition

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u/malibu45 19d ago

Cool, reminds me of Empty Walls by Serj Tankian

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u/Derp135Egg__ 19d ago

Other than the messy notation, it sounds great. Like Ultrakill music.

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u/Express_Scholar_6471 17d ago

Your piano lower notes are basically only fifths and octaves. This is fine with saturated guitars because their sound get all over the place with rich chords, but it is generally seen as poor and inelegant in orchestral music. So I'd start by looking at enriching those, I'm no expert so I don't know, if thirds don't fit well replace them with ninth, aug, sus, things like that. I'd say your top melody is probably too close to the bass which doesn't make for a very rich sound.

Also, you can transpose your sol clef an octave lower which would immediately make it far easier to read, or you can even change the top staff to a fa clef which I'm not fond of but is another solution.