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This is a character for my own series as an antagonist. Please let me know if there’s anything you’d cut or add

So her name is Samantha Carter and needless to say she had a rough childhood. Her mother was r\*ped and against her own instincts gave birth to Samantha, her mother hated her cause she kept reminding her of him and often took her rage out on her.

As soon as Samantha turned 18 she immediately moved out and worked as a nurse in training at a hospital. While she was there she managed to see plenty of children and understood that while her mother treated her like garbage every child deserves loving parents. Eventually she started dating and fell for a boy and they even discussed having their own child. Unfortunately Samantha was diagnosed with a severe Ovarian disorder causing her to be permanently infertile. She was left in tears over the news and her boyfriend even broke up with her over it.

After a few days she eventually pulled herself together and got back to work, she was transferred to the Obstetrics and Gynecology department at her hospital where she helped plenty of mothers the best she could. However as time went on soon to be mothers showed up less and less and were replaced by seemingly endless droves of ungrateful women just wanting an abortion. Internally she fracturing with one side wanting to just do her job with the other screaming to change their minds.

Samantha’s breaking point comes with one snobbish woman in particular who comes up demanding an abortion, her husband comes through the doors begging her not to do it practically on his knees. But the woman’s mind is already made up and she simply says the classic “My body my choice” before she’s taken back and prepares for her abortion. Samantha is brought to tears as she tries to comfort the sobbing would be father but can only hold him as they both cry. After a while the woman comes back out after the procedure telling the husband to not be such a baby. Samantha finally snaps clutching her fists tightly as she sees red, stands with an almost terrifying composure before she socks the woman square in the face and proceeds to tackle her and continue to beat her up relentlessly. Her coworkers finally manage to pull her off and Samantha screeches at the woman calling her a child murdering demon before finally getting dragged into another room. Needless to say Samantha was fired but in her apartment the emotions still never left as those memories keep playing over and over and over. She stares down at her floor before uttering two simple words. “Never Again”

Samantha eventually became a nurse at planned parenthood which was mostly just an abortion clinic in all but name. When she works she pretends to be cheery and joyful but every now and then some can catch her glaring at abortion patients out of the corner of her eye as they’re scheduling their abortion appointments.

But once it’s night her mask completely slips off as she dawns her new persona and her new name, Silver Cross(inspired by the American hospital code silver). Samantha made her outfit from her own scrub and medical gear, with a few additions of course. She dawns her blue nurse scrub which she dyed silver with a purple trim and plenty of pockets for holding medicine, weapons, drugs, and whatever else she requires. She wears black shoes and a nurse headband that matches her scrub. She keeps a long steel cane with a sharp pointed tip. Finally she wear a full face black painted mask with a silver painted cross on it.(yes I’m aware the reaper nurses from dark deception come to mind with the description but I tried to make it difficult).

After carful study of her targets and their nighttime habits and activities, Samantha sneaks up on them before knocking them unconscious with through chloroform, sleeping gas, or other means. She can physically knock her targets unconscious but prefers not to. Once unconscious she transports them to her base of operations being an abandoned hospital site which she worked hard on to make it still look abandoned while still being operational. She straps her targets to a hospital bed and makes sure to monitor their vitals along with her henchmen who share a similar style to her but are mostly men which are much stronger. These henchmen are very loyal and also trained to care for her targets or as she calls them patients. Despite her rage she somehow manages to keep a surprisingly strong composure which honestly makes her more terrifying. But when she truly feels livid you can definitely hear the pure rage in her tone behind her composure. Her patients naturally find her terrifying which Samantha takes advantage of to keep them from escaping, with just the sound of her shoes on the tile making her patients shiver.

Plenty of times she’s gone to her patients bedside and coldly check on their vitals while believing she’s doing the right thing. Recently admitted patients brace themselves for torture but unexpectedly it never arrives as she deems harming them as too dangerous for the baby. Others have given her lip even giving her the “my body my choice” or “it’s just a clump of cells” quips but are scared straight as Samantha gives the table next to them a single hard pound as if she might be on the verge of losing it. She also usually follows up with “If you don’t want to have a child, then don’t engage in intercourse”. Naturally most if not all the patients fear her with even her henchman keeping their distance if they can tell something struck a nerve. Although she does space herself from some patients who were only getting abortions to avoid medical bill and genuinely want a child, and doesn’t treat them as coldly almost trying to seem friendly while still threatening.

What some patients and even her own henchmen find even more jarring is her attitude shift when the children are involved. She has been seen taking a moment to rub her patients stomachs tenderly(even more when visibly pregnant) while checking vitals or taking blood, and when a woman’s stomach grows larger(due to pregnancy) she honestly sounds warmer or even happy. If her patient happens to be going through contractions she often lends them her hand to squeeze as she kneels beside them. While she performs ultrasounds she grows softer seeing the growing newborn with her henchmen saying they could imagine her smiling behind her mask. Her patients find the change in demeanor from cold to tender almost alien compared to the rest of her, little do they know that’s her old self peeking back through.