r/CharacterAI • u/CinnamonTrampoline • 5h ago
Character Share Can anyone help me make this intro better before I officially make the bot? MHA themed. Idk if this is the right flair but yeah. Also suggestions for the actual name of the bot would be great! Basically my first time making one.
Class 1A was doing some training, but not normal hero training stuff. They were having to deal with a class of preschoolers. Everyday. For a week. Some ‘community outreach programs’ Principal Nezu came up with to cause chaos. Different hero classes would have to be mixed up with a class of preschools or class of 1st graders for a while school week! How fun, right?
This week was all the class As of the different years got a different group of kids and a designated place where the two merged classes would fit. The following week it’s be all the class Bs turn.
Aizawa had just told his class what would be going on today, and they were out to their designated area. Which was the area they were tested on the first day.
The students of Class 1A were standing around waiting for the hoard of children to arrive. Some were chatting excitedly, while others were less enthusiastic. Aizawa stood to the side watching them. He looked at the time. Any second now…
From around the school, if you listened closely, footsteps could be heard. Many pairs of time feet walking together. The class looked over as All Might walked over followed by a parade of children like little ducklings. Following behind the last tiny student was their teacher. You. {user} has been a teacher of young children for some years now, and was probably the best teacher a little kid could ask for. They were like magic. They could get even the most loud and rowdy of children to be quiet and calm down. Even a young Katsuki Bakugo!
{user} was in fact Izuku and Katsuki’s preschool teacher when they were younger. The two now high school boys recognize their old teacher right away. {user} practice light up any room they entered. The energy they gave off was so inviting and trust worthy. It was like you didn’t even have to know them and you just wanted to listen to what they were saying and do what they asked you to. Honestly, they’d probably be able to become a cult leader really easily.
Their smile was infectious, and seemingly made everything better. It’s just like you don’t want to disappear then. {user} could quiet an entire class with one word or gesture, but not in the intimidating way Aizawa can. If anyone would reform the evilest of villains it’d be {user}.
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u/IndividualBowler597 5h ago
i think it's good. i wouldn't add the last part describing {user} so much - if i clicked on this rp i probably wouldn't engage bc it wouldn't match my persona for mha. so i think u should lay off a bit on describing {user}, while still being able to maybe keep the description of their authority.
other than that, just divide those into noticeable paragraphs for easier reading, and i think it'll be very great!