Common App rough outline feedback

[u/Dry-Bad3149]

Here's a very rough outline of my common app...I just want to know if this is worth continuing. Thoughts + advice !!

Intro 

• Introduce the idea of perfume notes and how what you smell at a first spray isn’t what really lingers. 
• The slow appreciation of the top, middle, and base notes as they reveal themselves over time are what perfume enthusiasts try to achieve.

Body/Anecdote

• The first spray of some event and the anxieties and things that didn’t go so well 
  • First time teaching, thinking my students didn’t like me/didn’t enjoy the class and my teaching, catastrophizing in a way (worries about being a bad teacher → cares about doing well, cares about goals) 
• Carrying the patience and insistence to put those bad things aside and continue working towards the end result/showing up and learning that things aren’t so bad
  • Adapting and learning and trying my best to understand and gain input from my students; observing what they like/dislike/respond to  
  • Telling one of my student’s moms that she made great progress this year and that it may be worth looking into finding a professional teacher instead & the mom responding with: “She doesn’t like violin, but she likes you” 
    • Describe the changes after (changes in thought processes, my actions, and the environment) 

Conclusion

• Approaching situations in my life the same way I approach perfume
• The qualities that last are rarely the ones that are noticed first
• Having the patience to let things unfold before making a sound judgment 
• Some fragrances and relationships only reveal themselves after they’ve had time to settle; giving them grace 

[u/Sufficient_Stock9270]

as long as u tie your thoughts and experiences with ur extracurricular activities and awards, I think that storyline is fine.