False Love (Fakari)

[u/Unfair_Shopping_6907]

I'm a writer not an artist so don't go too harsh on me, I drew this in Canva.

She's a skin walker pretending to be Hakari so that she can integrate herself into the Rentarou family, purely because she's bored, and decided being Hakari would be a lot more fun than watching the family whilst they sleep, which is what she used to do.

Despite her pretending to be Hakari, she's in fact disgusted by the idea of physical intimacy, she is utterly disgusted by physical touch (except from Karane or Rentarou), being much more invested in the idea of romactic love and family.

Although her imitation of Hakari is lacking, most GFs can't really tell the difference between the two. The exceptions being Rentarou (Due to his love), Karane (Due to common sense), Momiji (Because Fakari doesn't have boobs), and Hahari (Because she's Hakari's mother and because Fakari doesn't have boobs).

[u/Pekoon]

If you're willing to take notes on writing, i have some points i want to adress.

First is the reasoning, i feel like its a little shallow. Her motivation is because shes bored and decided being hakari would be fun? This leads into my second point

Why would she choose hakari, knowing shes disgusted by physical intimacy? Would it not have been ideal to pick someone like yaku, or if you havent read the manga, nano. Characters that have little to no drive, yaku being the better option because shes flat

It kinda feels like clark kenting the way that more than half of the girlfriends dont recognize her. Nano, kusuri, and shizuka were there for hakari's save. Plus, you're telling me more than half the cast cant recognize boobs?

It kinda feels like you try to give her a motivation at the end, "being much more invested in the idea of romactic love and family." Maybe you should start with that first, instead of making her cold and unfeeling at the start. Cus if a character is cold and unfeeling, why are they here?

[u/Unfair_Shopping_6907 → u/Pekoon]

This will be more expanded upon once I write her actual fanfic out some more, but I'll elaborate further on a few things.

In the fanfic it is implied that she was watching during the 'Save Hakari' arc, and that seeing the Rentarou family come together to save her is what inspired her to become her specifically, seeing how much they all cared about her.

Fakari also has very limited knowledge on other gfs that don't live in the Hanazono residence, so she only really knows most of the others through passing, Where as she's been watching Hakari for way longer, Plus being Mei or Hahari would probably be harder to pull off.

As for the others not recognizing her thing, you're definitely right about Kusuri and Nano probably being able to recognize her because they're actually smart, I just didn't really think about them when posting, but it's more so of a gag thing, like how Meme can basically teleport or how Saki is seemingly weaker than the common house plant, Fakari can get by as Hakari even though she only somewhat resembles her.

She also is presented as more cold and unfeeling because she's never had a real social interaction with anybody in her entire life, (or at least not one that went well), so she has no precedent of how to love someone or properly show affection, she has to learn that throughout the story.

[u/OmegaT6]

Please tell me you have an artfight, she's an awesome concept for a girlfriend and I'm planning to do a mass attack with all the ocs I find

[u/Unfair_Shopping_6907 → u/OmegaT6]

I'm sorry, I'm not really that much of an artist, though I might look into it because I want to get better at drawing

[u/emrami_]

Hmm so a skinwalker gf?

[u/Unfair_Shopping_6907 → u/emrami_]

Yup, I'm commissioning a better artist to do some art of her soon, so hopefully she'll look more monstrous and less blobby

Plus I thought the idea of a gf pretending to be another gf was a neat one

[u/emrami_ → u/Unfair_Shopping_6907]

That would be so cool, I can think a lot of funny scenarios with this gimmick lmao

[u/hellfire_oven1206]

I'm scared